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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v.23

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 23
It is true that work fulfilment plays a significant rule in people happiness. The wide range of people is spending considerably their amount of youth life in the job field. This essay will be talking about the reasons behind job satisfaction also examine if these hopes are feasible. There is no doubt many factors include fulfilling in jobs. Firstly, when an employee earns a reasonable level of salary and insurance coverage, they have adequate motivation to be productive. Secondly, posting environment is another important element to feel well-being. For example, some women cannot do their task and duties as efficiently as men, because several times they are abused or harassed by their colleague, therefore, emotionally fulfilling reduce- she has to combat with their basic life needs such as security. Also, not only having open-minded, understanding and supportive employer increase work satisfaction, but also soaring the quality wage. For instance, workers who are supported or encouraged by their boss have more loyalty, willpower and creativity in the workplace. However, it is difficult to imagine a world in which everyone is truly satisfied with their job. Most people work in order to earn a salary per month, and they would probably not to choose to spend eight or more hours each day doing their job if they do not need money. The need to earn money to pay bills, mortgages, every day living cost in much greater concern than wage accomplishment. In fact, I would claim that the majority of people dislike their occupants. Statistic shows, many employees work that is unrelated to their skills and the educational field. In conclusion, although the effects of career willingness cannot be underestimated in a person's life, there are several reasons that they determine a job. Consequently, it is nearly impossible to meet the expectation.
It is true that
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work
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fulfilment
plays a significant
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rule
in
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people
happiness. The wide range of
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people
is spending
considerably
their amount of youth life in the
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job
field. This essay will be talking about the reasons behind
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job
satisfaction
also
examine if these hopes are feasible.

There is no doubt
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many
factors include fulfilling in jobs.

Firstly
, when an employee earns a reasonable level of salary and insurance coverage, they have adequate motivation to be productive.
Secondly
, posting environment is another
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important
element to feel well-being.
For example
,
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some
women cannot do their task and duties as
efficiently
as
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men
,
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because
several times they
are abused
or harassed by their colleague,
therefore
,
emotionally
fulfilling
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reduce
- she
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has to
combat with their basic life needs such as security.
Also
, not
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only
having open-minded, understanding and supportive employer increase
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work
satisfaction,
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but
also
soaring the quality wage.
For instance
, workers who
are supported
or encouraged by their boss have more loyalty, willpower and creativity in the workplace.

However
, it is difficult to imagine a world in which everyone is
truly
satisfied with their
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job
. Most
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people
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work
in order to earn a salary per month, and they would
probably
not to choose to spend eight or more hours each day doing their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
if they do not need money. The need to earn money to pay bills, mortgages, every day living cost in much greater concern than wage accomplishment.

In fact, I would claim that the majority of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
dislike their occupants. Statistic
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shows
,
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many
employees
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
that
is unrelated
to their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and the educational field.

In conclusion
, although the effects of career willingness cannot
be underestimated
in a person's life, there are several reasons that they determine a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
.
Consequently
, it is
nearly
impossible to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the expectation.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual well-being. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 23

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
300 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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