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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v.19

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 19
Eighty percent of the time gets devoted at work, rather than with family and friends, it is important to consider which factors influence job satisfaction. This essay will explore a few of these factors and then explain how they allow job satisfaction to be within the reach of every worker. Mental health is of utmost importance, which is possible to maintain to a supreme level if one has happiness in job satisfaction. Furthermore, if a hobby is converted to monetary benefits such as job or business, then one can be on cloud nine, because they won’t feel like they are working. Moreover, in such cases, it will be great job satisfaction which will lead to individual wellbeing. Preferred work leads to job satisfaction, because this kind of work never forces one to go beyond their capacity to achieve the results. Whatever hobby is possessed since childhood, same is being continued to earn money in adulthood, which leads to better quality and outstanding results, with great job satisfaction. Secondly, as one gets work life balance, it generates job satisfaction which leads to individual wellbeing. As one must work to earn money, in most of the cases, job involves performing duties which are not of liking to the employees considering their personal interests. Such as doing tax calculations for entire company’s all geographical locations, will be a nightmare to the executive who likes to sing and perform on stage, such person will never get job satisfaction. Furthermore, one should stay away from family and friends to get the pay check at the end of the month for the task performed in the month, which is a painful experience for female workers to stay away from kids and parents, this will not lead to any kind of satisfaction. It is not realistic to expect job satisfaction of all the employees. Many will have to compromise. So developing interest in whatever task is assigned to workers is the key to get job satisfaction in such cases. In conclusion, job satisfaction is not possible for all the workers, in fact, if they can generate interest in the task they are assigned to, then there is a high chance of achieving the paramount satisfaction of the work they do by staying away from families.
Eighty percent of the time
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devoted at
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work
,
rather
than with family and friends, it is
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important
to consider which factors influence
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job
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satisfaction
. This essay will explore a few of these factors and then
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explain
how they
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allow
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job
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satisfaction
to be within the reach of every worker.

Mental health is of utmost importance, which is possible to maintain to a supreme level if one has happiness in
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job
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satisfaction
.
Furthermore
, if a hobby
is converted
to monetary benefits such as
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job
or business, then one can be on cloud nine,
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because
they won’t feel like they are working.
Moreover
, in such cases, it will be great
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job
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satisfaction
which will
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lead
to individual
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wellbeing
.

Preferred
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work
leads to
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job
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satisfaction
,
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because
this kind of
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work
never forces one to go beyond their capacity to achieve the results. Whatever hobby
is possessed
since childhood, same is
being continued
to earn money in adulthood, which leads to better quality and outstanding results, with great
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job
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satisfaction
.
Secondly
, as one
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gets
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work life
balance, it generates
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job
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satisfaction
which leads to individual
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wellbeing
.

As one
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must
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work
to earn money, in most of the cases,
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job
involves performing duties which are not of liking to the employees considering their personal interests. Such as doing tax calculations for entire
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company
’s all geographical locations, will be a nightmare to the executive who likes to sing and perform on stage, such person will never
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get
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job
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satisfaction
.
Furthermore
, one should stay away from family and friends to
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get
the pay
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check
at the
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end
of the month for the task performed in the month, which is a painful experience for female workers to stay away from kids and parents, this will not
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lead
to any kind of
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satisfaction
. It is not realistic to
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expect
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job
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satisfaction
of all the employees.
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Many
will
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have to
compromise.
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So
developing interest in whatever task
is assigned
to workers is the key to
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get
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job
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satisfaction
in such cases.

In conclusion
,
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job
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satisfaction
is not possible for all the workers, in fact, if they can generate interest in the task they
are assigned
to, then there is a high chance of achieving the paramount
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satisfaction
of the
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work
they do by staying away from families.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 19

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
378 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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