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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v.12

As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 12
Any individual can remain well if he is good for the most part of his life. Most people remain at job most of the time, thus happiness in the workplace is the key to a happy life overall. There are various factors which impact enjoyment at work. This essay will elaborate the characteristics of job satisfaction. First of all, any work is pleasant only if it is highly paid. If workers are not paid well, they might have to do double shifts which would be tiring and hence reducing the overall efficiency at performance. If employees acquire enough wealth so as to secure their future, they will remain stable, perform efficiently and increase the productivity of the company as well. On the contrary, if they are underpaid, they will be looking for an opportunity to quit. Second important factor for job comfort is timely promotion. If work evaluation is accurate and promotions are timely anyone would be contented. This happiness would multiply and disseminate to other family members and the society. Various researches have proved that if workers are not correctly evaluated and timely promoted, they gradually lose their tempo. The third element for workplace contentment is company initiated professional development. For example, a doctor needs to be continually trained and reinforced about the newer diseases and developments in therapy. Apart from these, enjoyment of the job also comes with other significant factors such as flexibility of working hours, official vacation plans and additional financial supports when necessary. However, job satisfaction is individual attitude. Two similar workers might have different levels of satisfaction with the same grade of work and facilities. Actual job pleasure cannot be expected for all the workers. In conclusion, this essay has highlighted handsome salary, unbiased promotions and continued career reinforcements as the main elements defining happiness in the workplace.
Any individual can remain well if he is
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good
for the most part
of his life. Most
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people
remain at
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job
most of the time,
thus
happiness in the workplace is the key to a happy life
overall
. There are various factors which impact enjoyment at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
. This essay will elaborate the characteristics of
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job
satisfaction.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, any
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work
is pleasant
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
if it is
highly
paid. If workers are not paid well, they might
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
do double shifts which would be tiring and
hence
reducing the
overall
efficiency at performance. If employees acquire
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
wealth
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
secure their future, they will remain stable, perform
efficiently
and increase the productivity of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
as well
.
On the contrary
, if they are underpaid, they will be looking for an opportunity to quit.

Second
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
factor for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
comfort is timely promotion. If
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
evaluation is accurate and promotions are timely anyone would
be contented
. This happiness would multiply and disseminate to other family members and the society. Various researches have proved that if workers are not
correctly
evaluated and timely promoted, they
gradually
lose their tempo.

The third element for workplace contentment is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
initiated professional development.
For example
, a doctor needs to be
continually
trained and reinforced about the newer diseases and developments in therapy.

Apart from these, enjoyment of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
with other significant factors such as flexibility of working hours, official vacation plans and additional financial supports when necessary.

However
,
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job
satisfaction is individual attitude. Two similar workers might have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
levels of satisfaction with the same grade of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
and facilities. Actual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
pleasure cannot be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
for all the workers.

In conclusion
, this essay has highlighted handsome salary, unbiased promotions and continued career reinforcements as the main elements defining happiness in the workplace.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? v. 12

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
304 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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