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as conutries develop their population tend to live individually or as small family units.ehat are the causes of this trend what are the effects of this trend

as conutries develop their population tend to live individually or as small family units. ehat are the causes of this trend what are the effects of this trend MqLnQ
Increasing number of people in any develop area tend to do changes to their family trends i. e more conjugal families are formed as a result. This is mainly because of urbanisation and a money orientated conduct towards life. there are also number of effects of such changes in a family structure. Firstly, the developments in this ever changing world are causing people to migrate from one place to another by hook or by crook. This is due to the urbanization, big cities of countries are becoming hub of better opportunities for the general well-being of their population. For example, rural individual working in a multinational firm eventually take his/her family to the samne city he/she working in. Furthermore, family structure is becoming nuclear with each passing day, due to the lack of resources to be fulfilled in an extended family. Every breadwinner
Increasing number of
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people
in any develop area tend to do
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changes
to their
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family
trends i. e more conjugal
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families
are formed
as a result
. This is
mainly
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because
of
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urbanisation
and
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a money
orientated conduct towards life.
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there
are
also
number of effects of such
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changes
in a
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family
structure.
Firstly
, the developments in this
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ever changing
world are causing
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people
to migrate from one place to another by hook or by crook. This is due to the
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urbanization
,
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big
cities of countries are becoming hub of better opportunities for the general well-being of their population.
For example
, rural individual working in a multinational firm
eventually
take his/her
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family
to the
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samne
city he/she working in.
Furthermore
,
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family
structure is becoming nuclear with each passing day, due to the lack of resources to
be fulfilled
in an extended
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family
. Every
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breadwinner

IELTS essay as conutries develop their population tend to live individually or as small family units. ehat are the causes of this trend what are the effects of this trend

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142 words
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