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As compared to the past, people nowadays are choosing to have fewer children than their parents and grandparents. Describe some of the problems that having fewer children can cause and suggest at least one possible solution.

As compared to the past, people nowadays are choosing to have fewer children than their parents and grandparents. Describe some of the problems that having fewer children can cause and suggest at least one possible solution. Abbe
Western societies are known for low birthrates. While a couple of generations back, couples often had four or more children, the average today hovers around one or two. Having fewer children may require additional help from outside the immediate family and slower developmental growth for their youngest additions, though the trend could be reversed by changing how families are represented. When parents have fewer children, the need for support from outside the nuclear family increases while development tends to slow. For working parents, a younger only-child may require another guardian from extended family, a friend of the parents’, or even daycare. This can be a burden in terms of others’ time and energy, or a family’s finances in the latter case. An older sibling, however, could instead handle babysitting responsibilities. Additionally, younger siblings often model older brothers and sisters. Younger children often learn to walk faster, talk faster, and achieve other milestones more quickly in these situations. While certainly not the end of the world if a child grows up alone, parents eager to get past some of the early hurdles may wish for such an example. To encourage parents to have more kids would firstly require changing how families are represented in the media. People's attitudes are influenced very much by indirect messages, even from the shows they watch. For example, if the families they stream on screen usually consist of one or two children, it could be associated as the norm. As in the case of the youngest internalizing the behavior of their older siblings, surrounding viewers with larger model families could potentially increase the amount of kids they consider as standard. In conclusion, many families today stop at one or two children, but need additional support. Additionally, their kids may not develop as quickly in certain areas. By incorporating larger families in the media, however, the trend could be reversed.
Western societies
are known
for low birthrates. While a couple of generations
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had four or more
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children
, the average
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today
hovers around one or two. Having

fewer
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children
may require additional
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help
from outside the immediate
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family
and slower

developmental growth for their youngest additions, though the trend could
be reversed
by

changing how
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families
are represented
.

When
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parents
have fewer
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children
, the need for support from outside the nuclear

family increases while development tends to slow. For working
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parents
, a younger
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only
-child

may require another guardian from extended
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family
, a friend of the
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parents’
, or even daycare.

This can be a burden in terms of others’ time and energy, or a
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family’s
finances in the latter

case. An older sibling,
however
, could
instead
handle babysitting responsibilities.

Additionally
, younger siblings
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often
model older brothers and sisters. Younger
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children
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often


learn to walk faster, talk faster, and achieve other milestones more
quickly
in these situations.

While
certainly
not the
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end
of the world if a child grows up alone,
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parents
eager to
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get
past

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some of the
early hurdles may wish for such an example.

To encourage
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parents
to have more kids would
firstly
require changing how families

are represented
in the media.
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People
's attitudes
are influenced
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very
much by indirect

messages, even from the
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shows
they
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watch
.
For example
, if the
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families
they stream on

screen
usually
consist of one or two
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children
, it could
be associated
as the norm. As in the

case of the youngest internalizing the behavior of their older siblings, surrounding viewers

with larger model
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families
could
potentially
increase the amount of kids they consider as

standard.

In conclusion
,
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many
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families
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today
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stop
at one or two
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children
,
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but
need additional

support.
Additionally
, their kids may not develop as
quickly
in certain areas. By

incorporating larger
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families
in the media,
however
, the trend could
be reversed
.
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IELTS essay As compared to the past, people nowadays are choosing to have fewer children than their parents and grandparents. Describe some of the problems that having fewer children can cause and suggest at least one possible solution.

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313 words
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