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As children become adult their social behavior changes in some way what are the main differences between young children social behavior and adults 1
It is commonly believed that the best way to succeed in education is by the memorization of a variety of subjects. I disagree with this statement, as education should not be considered as a tool, but has a goal to gain new knowledge and more culture. On the one hand, memorizing subjects could be the fastest way to learn new skills. It is just a matter of reading different times the same book and repeat it for another several times until we realize that we already know the information from the book. It is easier to recall, for example special dates and names, or maths formulas. On the other hand, I believe that this method is not enough efficient to be recognized as the best way to learn. Firstly, education is key in the personal and the interpersonal formation of a person. Throughout schooling, a person can develop his own opinions, points of view and beliefs about a variety of topics. As a result, it is significant that people understand what they are studying, why the subject is important and how to apply the acquaintance to everyday life. Therefore, understanding is the best tool for achieving academic success. Secondly, by memorizing different subjects, it is more likely to happen that we forget what we have just studied. As we use the same method in every class, the information can be frequently forgotten, due to the fact that we do not understand it and we acquire new knowledge in so little period of time. To summarize, memorization could be used once in a while to study when we don't have enough time, but to really learn and gain new skills, is important to understand truly what we are studying.
It is
commonly
believed that the best way to succeed in education is by the memorization of a variety of
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subjects
. I disagree with this statement, as education should not
be considered
as a tool,
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but
has a goal to gain
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new
knowledge and more culture.

On the one hand, memorizing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
could be the fastest way to learn
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new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. It is
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just
a matter of reading
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different
times the same book and repeat it for another several times until we realize that we already know the information from the book. It is easier to recall,
for example
special dates and names, or
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maths
formulas.

On the other hand
, I believe that this method is not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
efficient to
be recognized
as the best way to learn.
Firstly
, education is key in the personal and the interpersonal formation of a person. Throughout schooling, a person can develop his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
opinions, points of view and beliefs about a variety of topics.
As a result
, it is significant that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
understand what they are studying, why the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
and how to apply the acquaintance to everyday life.
Therefore
, understanding is the best tool for achieving academic success.

Secondly
, by memorizing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
, it is more likely to happen that we forget what we have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
studied. As we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the same method in every
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
, the information can be
frequently
forgotten, due to the fact that we do not understand
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it and
we acquire
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new
knowledge in
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so
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little
period of time.

To summarize
, memorization could be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
once in a while to study when we don't have
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enough
time,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
to
really
learn and gain
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new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
, is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to understand
truly
what we are studying.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay As children become adult their social behavior changes in some way what are the main differences between young children social behavior and adults 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
288 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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