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As a traditional family in Vietnam, I have a big one

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As a traditional family in Vietnam, I have a big one. My family has 5 members, including Mom, Dad, Grandma, sister, and me. My mom’s name is Giang. She has long hair and black eyes. She is a teacher. My Dad’s name is Trung. He is tall and very strong. His job is doctor. For me, my mom is the most beautiful woman, and my dad is the most wonderful man. And my grandma’s name is Tam. She is 80 years old. Besides, another woman who I love so much is my sister. Her name is Linh. She is 26 years old, and she is a beautiful woman like Mom. Now, she is living in Ha Noi capital, because of her jobs. I really love my family, and I hope that we are always together anyway.
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Giang
. She has long hair and black eyes. She is a teacher. My Dad’s
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Trung
. He is tall and
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strong. His job is doctor. For me, my
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. And my grandma’s
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, another woman who I
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Linh
. She is 26 years
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, and she is a
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IELTS essay As a traditional family in Vietnam, I have a big one

Essay
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136 words
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