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Art is is very important to the country.it should be protected and funded by the Government.To what extend do you agree or did agree?

Art is is very important to the country. it should be protected and funded by the Government. r8GB6
Craft is an integral part of our society. In order to protect profession, the Government should support the artist to achieve their goals. I agree the statement that, all types of art forms should be protected and an inventor should pay some amount as a reward. Firstly, in the past era, people were communicating with the use of different painting and craft. we can see the enhancing beauty of some of the art forms from the craft gallery. For instance, If visit some temples in Asia, we could see some of the amazing sculptures made by the expert. secondly, if you visit any monument we can find the beauty and hard work behind it. so, it is a must to support the inventor. masses nowadays, visit art galleries to purchase a different kind of art. Also, through art we can identify the culture of that county. On the other hand, Nowadays, Globalization has created many job opportunities for an Artists. There are many computer-based jobs are available. To illustrate, Graphic designing is one of the major advanced form of art these days. and some sectors are getting good payment for that. How ever, the Government need to keep some base funding for the artists especially those who are taking low income. To sum up, I agree with the statement that all forms of art should be protected even though if artists paid good salaries, the Government has to create a law for the favour of the artists.
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Government
should support the
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artist
to achieve their goals. I
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agree
the statement that, all types of
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art
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forms
should
be protected
and an inventor should pay
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some
amount as a reward.

Firstly
, in the past era,
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people
were communicating with the
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use
of
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different
painting and craft.
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we
can
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see
the enhancing beauty of
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some of the
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art
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forms
from the craft gallery.
For instance
, If visit
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some
temples in Asia, we could
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see
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some of the
amazing sculptures made by the expert.

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secondly
, if you visit any monument we can find the beauty and
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hard
work behind it.
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so
, it is a
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must to
support the inventor.
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masses
nowadays, visit
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art
galleries to
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purchase
a
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different
kind of
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art
.
Also
, through
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art
we can identify the culture of that county.

On the other hand
, Nowadays, Globalization has created
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many
job opportunities for an
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Artists
. There are
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many
computer-based jobs are available. To illustrate, Graphic designing is one of the major advanced
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form
of
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art
these days.
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and
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some
sectors are getting
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good
payment for that.
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How ever
, the
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Government
need to
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keep
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some
base funding for the
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artists
especially
those who are taking low income.

To sum up, I
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agree
with the statement that all
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forms
of
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art
should
be protected
even though
if
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artists
paid
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good
salaries, the
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Government
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has to
create a law for the
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favour
of the
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IELTS essay Art is is very important to the country. it should be protected and funded by the Government.

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