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are you addicted to smartphone?

are you addicted to smartphone? 2Rwdx
We cannot ignore phones’ drawbacks. Firstly, people, especially the young, tend to have mobile phone with them all the time, which reduce the real connection between people. For instance, if you and your friends hang out at a cafe and one of you keeps using his or her phone constantly, it would be uncomfortable. Besides, the overuse of mobile phone even reduce the efficiency of your study and your work. It is because people are usually attracted by entertainment functions like games, social media, …, which waste a lot of their time. In addition, some types of phone’s screen light can harm your eyes and the radiation from this device is not good for your brain and your health.
We cannot
ignore
phones’
drawbacks.
Firstly
,
people
,
especially
the young, tend to have mobile
phone
with them all the time, which
reduce
the real
connection between
people
.
For instance
, if you and your friends hang out at a
cafe
and one of you
keeps
using
his or her
phone
constantly
, it would be uncomfortable.
Besides
, the overuse of mobile
phone
even
reduce
the efficiency of your study and your work. It is
because
people
are
usually
attracted by entertainment functions like games, social media, …, which waste
a lot of
their time.
In addition
,
some
types of
phone’s
screen light can harm your eyes and the radiation from this device is not
good
for your brain and your health.
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IELTS essay are you addicted to smartphone?

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  American English
1 paragraphs
119 words
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