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An article: Music in our lives

An article: Music in our lives 9wOyp
Music is one of the most vital things in my life, so I could confirm that unless music excists, our lives would become so hard. Whenever you suffer from depress, your head is always healed by music. When someone need to let their hair down, music is still the best theorapy. There are several kinds of music, such as pop, dance, country etc. . Each kind of music has several emotions, happy, loving, sad, angry, . . It is easy to find the song suitable for your feeling of that moment. If you are sad, any happy song could help you feel better. If you are exhauted, the song with strong rhythm would takes you more energy. It can't be denied that a large number of the latest research are improving that music is vital for improving your quality of life. If you are not enjoying your music time, start right now.
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IELTS essay An article: Music in our lives

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
152 words
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