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Animals species is getting extinct. But people are not concerned ?what should be done about it? Is it a positive or negative effect.

Animals species is getting extinct. But people are not concerned? what should be done about it? Is it a positive or negative effect. OrMQE
Ecosystems depend on plants and animal species as their foundation. All animals are vital for a well balanced, healthy eco system. However currently most animals are at a risk of being endangered while some have already become extinct. It is evident that the main cause for this is the reckless behavior of human beings who ironically seems to be the least concerned about this tragedy. Deforestation, overhunting, overfishing, habitat destruction and climate change are some of the main causes behind this situation. All these activities are done by humans with no regards to the unpropitious consequences. Day by day deforestation rates escalate. People tend to fish and hunt with no limitations causing other animals in the eco system to lose their daily food. Moreover, excessive hunting leads to destruction of animal’s homes. Furthermore climate change has had drastic effects on animals like polar bears who are endangered due to glaziers melting, habitat destruction and loss of food sources. Environmental pollution has resulted in plastic waste being secreted into the oceans and damaging coral reefs, thus imposing a threat to all sea animals especially turtles who have been named as “critically endangered species”. Loss of these various animal species will cause an imbalance in the eco systems, eventually making life harder for Human beings themselves. This shows that human behavior has a large input into this ongoing disaster. However people are not concerned to make a change. People are more addicted to gaining sources from the environment for monetary needs, without ever giving back to our ecosystems. Even though there are other factors for animal species extinction, even a small change done by the human beings could cause a positive domino effect on the eco systems. There have already been various acts and societies that have done tremendous amount of work to fight against animal extinction. However more awareness has to be raised among societies in order to make a real difference. By doing this people will be more concerned due to the negative drawbacks of species being wiped out. People have to be discouraged to buy products made out of endangered species and to purchase more eco friendly products. More wild life reservations and breeding programs could reduce the risk of potential extinction. There should be more strict rules and regulations to make sure that excessive hunting or fishing is prevented. In conclusion, it is essential and prudent for human beings to understand the dangers of animal extinction. With awareness and disciplinary actions, we could make a difference and conserve these species as all animals are pillars of a healthy eco system.
Ecosystems depend on plants and
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animal
species as their foundation. All
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animals
are vital for a
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well balanced
, healthy eco
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system
.
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However
currently
most
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animals
are at a
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risk
of being
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endangered
while
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some
have already become extinct. It is evident that the main
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cause
for this is the reckless behavior of
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human
beings who
ironically
seems to be the least concerned about this tragedy.

Deforestation, overhunting, overfishing, habitat destruction and climate
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change
are
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some of the
main
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causes
behind this situation. All these activities
are done
by
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humans
with no regards to the unpropitious consequences. Day by day deforestation rates escalate.
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People
tend to fish and hunt with no limitations causing other
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animals
in the eco
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system
to lose their daily food.
Moreover
, excessive hunting leads to destruction of
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animal’s
homes.
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Furthermore
climate
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change
has had drastic effects on
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animals
like polar bears who are
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endangered
due to glaziers melting, habitat destruction and loss of food sources. Environmental pollution has resulted in plastic waste
being secreted
into the oceans and damaging coral reefs,
thus
imposing a threat to all sea
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animals
especially
turtles who have
been named
as “
critically
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endangered
species”. Loss of these various
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animal
species will
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cause
an imbalance in the eco
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systems
,
eventually
making life harder for
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Human
beings themselves.

This
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shows
that
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human
behavior has a large input into this ongoing disaster.
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However
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people
are not concerned to
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make
a
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change
.
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People
are more addicted to gaining sources from the environment for monetary needs, without ever giving back to our ecosystems.
Even though
there are other factors for
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animal
species
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extinction
, even a
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small
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change
done by the
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human
beings could
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cause
a
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positive
domino effect on the eco
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systems
. There have already been various acts and societies that have done tremendous amount of work to fight against
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animal
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extinction
.
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However
more awareness
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has to
be raised
among societies in order to
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make
a real difference. By doing this
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people
will be more concerned due to the
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negative
drawbacks of species
being wiped
out.
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People
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have to
be discouraged
to
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buy
products made out of
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endangered
species and to
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purchase
more
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eco friendly
products. More wild life reservations and breeding programs could
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reduce
the
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risk
of potential
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extinction
. There should be more strict
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rules
and regulations to
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make
sure that excessive hunting or fishing is
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prevented
.

In conclusion
, it is essential and prudent for
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human
beings to understand the
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dangers
of
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animal
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extinction
. With awareness and disciplinary actions, we could
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make
a difference and conserve these species as all
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animals
are pillars of a healthy eco
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system
.
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IELTS essay Animals species is getting extinct. But people are not concerned? what should be done about it? Is it a positive or negative effect.

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