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An story about mu bedroom

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Warning ⚠️ This story is not based on reality Have you ever heard these same words "Will you please stop playing and go and clean up your room? " yelled mum Or "how slutty you are" Or other or s Yeah you have heard when your mum or dad tell you to clean your room, But you say After another round of play Or After an hour of snoozing Or other or s And after all you run off and do something else. They Say If You Want To Tell A Story Right You Gotta Start At The Beginning, so let's just start from my beginning It was a Friday just like the previous full of grunts but I just stand up and shouted: I will end this period I climbed the stairs with firm steps and opened my room with confidence to start cleaning and then I lost my confidence. (mom and dad were right my room became more than just a bedroom) every corner was crammed with trash, closets overflowing with clothes and so on You know what? I had to start an enormous task decluttering But I won't give up I will get things under control and get rid of anything that once I thought could never live without I called my super-orginized, less-is-more kind of friend and asked for some help
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This story is not based on reality

Have you ever heard these same words

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"
Will you
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please
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stop
playing and go and clean up your room?
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"
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yelled
mum

Or

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"
how slutty you are
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"


Or other or
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s


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Yeah
you have heard when your mum or dad
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tell
you to clean your room,

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But
you say

After another round of play

Or

After an hour of snoozing

Or other or s

And
after all
you run off and do something else.

They Say If You Want To
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Tell
A Story Right You
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Gotta
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Start
At The Beginning,
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so
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let
's
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just
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start
from my beginning

It was a Friday
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just
like the previous full of grunts
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but
I
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just
stand up and shouted: I will
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end
this period

I climbed the stairs with firm steps and opened my room with confidence to
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start
cleaning and then I lost my confidence. (mom and dad were right my room became more than
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just
a bedroom)

every corner
was crammed
with trash, closets overflowing with clothes and
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so
on

You know what? I had to
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start
an enormous task
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decluttering


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But
I won't give up

I will
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get
things under control and
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get
rid of anything that once I
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thought
could never
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live
without

I called my
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super-orginized
, less-is-more kind of friend and
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asked for
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some
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help
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IELTS essay An story about mu bedroom

Essay
  American English
12 paragraphs
224 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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