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An occasion when you wanted to give up, but carried on instead

An occasion when you wanted to give up, but carried on instead PEpOp
We, humans always want success easily. However, many obstacles have to be faced prior to our potential point. We have all considered giving up in these situations until we are motivated. At times, we are likely to carry on no matter how turbulent it is. A few years ago, I experienced an occasion in which I wanted to give up and stop trying. It was participating in Central Level English Competition. We were given nine themes and the topics can be varied depending on the themes. We were given two weeks to practise all the themes. It was pretty short for me. The worst point was that I had no idea which topic to practise. On the one hand, I was ambitious to get the first prize since I would like to be distinguished as the first prize winner. I started to be unmotivated and unwilling to continue. No choice but, I studied possible topics that I could think of from each theme by heart. If we study at least 3 topics from each theme, there are 24 topics in total. However, no one knows which titles are we are going to answer. I prepared seven topics in each theme and 63 topics on the whole. I studied day and night during those two weeks. The competition was in the December holidays. As a have already mentioned, it is not said to be easy. While my friends were spending their holidays, I was trapped in the house studying. While my friends were playing happily, I was studying. I had to sacrifice most of the things I would like to do, starting from the food I would like to try and ending with playing with my friends. Who would like to do those things? But, my sacrifice, my hard work, my enthusiasm brought me the result. I wanted. It was beyond my expectation. Even though I had to present the topic I haven’t prepared, I could present it smoothly due to the help of the essays I have studied and my supportive family. The result was beyond my expectation To sum up, we should always keep trying till we reach our potential point. The important key to cherish your life is to do what you believe is right and stay true to yourself and live the life that you want. Do the best out of you can and try not to lose sight of your goal. You should cut out negativity, forget complaints and love yourself.
We, humans always want success
easily
.
However
,
many
obstacles
have to
be faced
prior to our potential point. We have all considered giving up in these situations until we
are motivated
. At times, we are likely to carry on no matter how turbulent it is.

A few years ago, I experienced an occasion in which I wanted to give up and
stop
trying. It was participating in Central Level English Competition. We were
given
nine
themes
and the
topics
can
be varied
depending on the
themes
. We were
given
two weeks to
practise
all the
themes
. It was pretty short for me. The worst point was that I had no
idea
which
topic
to
practise
. On the one hand, I was ambitious to
get
the
first
prize since I would like to
be distinguished
as the
first
prize winner. I
started
to
be unmotivated
and unwilling to continue.

No choice
but
, I studied possible
topics
that I could
think
of from each
theme
by heart. If we study at least 3
topics
from each
theme
, there are 24
topics
in total.
However
, no one knows which titles are we are going to answer. I prepared seven
topics
in each
theme
and 63
topics
on the whole
. I studied day and night during those two weeks.

The competition was in the December holidays. As
a
have already mentioned, it is not said to be easy. While my friends were spending their holidays, I
was trapped
in the
house
studying. While my friends were playing
happily
, I was studying. I had to sacrifice most of the things I would like to do, starting from the food I would like to
try and
ending with playing with my friends. Who would like to do those things?
But
, my sacrifice, my
hard
work, my enthusiasm brought me the result. I wanted. It was beyond my expectation.
Even though
I had to present the
topic
I haven’t prepared, I could present it
smoothly
due to the
help
of the essays I have studied and my supportive family. The result was beyond my expectation

To sum up, we should always
keep
trying till we reach our potential point. The
important
key to cherish your life is to do what you believe is right and stay true to yourself and
live
the life that you want. Do the best out of you can and try not to lose sight of your goal. You should
cut
out negativity, forget complaints and
love
yourself.
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IELTS essay An occasion when you wanted to give up, but carried on instead

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
415 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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