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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problem does this cause? What solution do you suggest to deal with this situation?

An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problem does this cause? What solution do you suggest to deal with this situation? rxL2
In recent years many academic and high educated people immigrate to rich nations. This essay will argue what problem in result of this would cause in their own country and also this essay will suggest how raising children in schools with anti selfishness values would help this problem There are a huge number of talented and academic people with important jobs which helps the improvement of society, have left their country to live in better circumstances. When a nation loses its potential human resource and high educated people it won’t be able to grow and this leads to go backward and experience more poverty. As an example, eighty percent of university graduates in Iran leave their country to Europe and USA which makes the country experience worse economics and life quality. So that leaving country with a great potential to improve it, has grown in recent years. As young age has a big effect on the person to choose his future way in life, teaching children in school ages the concept of nationalism and moral values would avoid the children to leave their country and denying its improvement and of course their great role they play for their nation. For example, in Japan children are being taught to attempt for their society and being loyal to their people. So that in order to avoid this problem, media and school can help to lead children thinking system to more loyal and social thinking system. To summarize, immigration of high educated people has made problems for these countries. This essay argued what problem is caused by this action such as poverty and unsuccessfulness for a nation and also suggested value making in young ages to prevent this problem.
In recent years
many
academic and high educated
people
immigrate to rich
nations
. This essay will argue what
problem
in result of this would cause in their
own
country
and
also
this essay will suggest how raising
children
in schools with
anti selfishness
values would
help
this problem

There are a huge number of talented and academic
people
with
important
jobs which
helps
the improvement of society, have
left
their
country
to
live
in better circumstances. When a
nation
loses its potential human resource and high educated
people
it won’t be able to grow and this leads to go backward and experience more poverty. As an example, eighty percent of university graduates in Iran
leave
their
country
to Europe and USA which
makes
the
country
experience worse economics and life quality.
So
that leaving
country
with a great potential to
improve
it, has grown in recent years.

As young age has a
big
effect on the person to choose his future way in life, teaching
children
in school ages the concept of nationalism and moral values would avoid the
children
to
leave
their
country
and denying its improvement and
of course
their great role they play for their
nation
.
For example
, in Japan
children
are
being taught
to attempt for their society and being loyal to their
people
.
So
that in order to avoid this
problem
, media and school can
help
to lead
children
thinking system to more loyal and social thinking system.

To summarize
, immigration of high educated
people
has
made
problems
for these
countries
. This essay argued what
problem
is caused
by this action such as poverty and
unsuccessfulness
for a
nation
and
also
suggested value making in young ages to
prevent
this
problem
.
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IELTS essay An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problem does this cause? What solution do you suggest to deal with this situation?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
286 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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