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An increasing number of people change their career during their work life . What are the reasons of this . Reasons and positive or negative.n

Nowadays, majority of multitudes during work life change their career. Despite, I think there are less adverse impact on humans life instead of positive effect. This essay I will discuss a number of reasons as well numerous positive effect in upcoming paragraphs. Discussing the first reason, why people change their career? in these days, a highly amount of individuals are migrated from urban areas because they have face plethora of hurdles owing to job occupations and passions. On the light of fact that, if they does not achieve their goals and in addition, some times they have don't interest in their jobs. Without any doubt, many times some companies gave highly paid. What's, people work in a companies or factories that time their managers are not honest and sometimes they give less salary to employees. Consequently, it is the best reasons which masses change their passions.
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change
their career. Despite, I
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life
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effect. This essay I will discuss a number of reasons
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positive
effect in upcoming paragraphs.

Discussing the
first
reason, why
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people
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change
their career?
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in
these days, a
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highly amount
of individuals
are migrated
from urban areas
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because
they have face plethora of hurdles owing to job occupations and passions. On the light of fact that, if they
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does
not achieve their goals and
in addition
,
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some
times they have don't interest in their jobs. Without any doubt,
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many
times
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some
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companies
gave
highly
paid. What's,
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people
work in a
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companies
or factories that time their managers are not honest and
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sometimes
they give less salary to employees.
Consequently
, it is the best reasons which masses
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change
their passions.

IELTS essay An increasing number of people change their career during their work life. What are the reasons of this. Reasons and positive or negative. n

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
146 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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