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An increasing number of people are now using the internet to meet new people and socialise. Some people think this has brought people closer together while others think people are becoming more isolated? Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

An increasing number of people are now using the internet to meet new people and socialise. Some people think this has brought people closer together while others think people are becoming more isolated? moBL
In the age of technology, individuals all over the globe are surfacing the web, utilizing it to form bonds with other humans and expanding their circle. The internet has allowed interaction and conversation between people from any corner of the world and giving a platform to voice our opinions and thoughts with millions of others. However, it has also made people aloof and a shut-in, taking their ability to form meaningful contact and giving them social anxiety. With the constant advancements in the field of online communication, social media has minimized our distance and brought us closer by allowing us to text or message one another easily and efficiently as long as we have network. It has helped us form friendship with individuals from various nations and learn about their culture and traditions while also assisting in maintaining long distance relationships with family and significant other. The web has aided in finding ones having similar interests and problems and enabled us to confide in the said other person. It had made working easier by enabling colleagues to send and receive information via electronic mails. Companies can expand their business and grow their audience. More importantly, people are becoming more aware of many unfortunate events occurring in the world and sending their emotional and financial support with one click through message boards, campaign and relief websites, bringing mankind together in some kind of way. As there are many advantages using the internet, it is not surprising to say there exists a negative side too. Everyone is a minor celebrity having a tiny following on social media platforms. It is more than easier in the current state of the world for people to steal others identity and pretend as them. The deeper part of the web, dark web allowing people to sell illegal items and explicit multimedia and also allowing people to create their own disturbing chat rooms. Most of us hate the idea of confrontation as it exposes our vulnerable side. But with the internet, we can remain anonymous while sharing our ideas. It distances us from the real world and gets us addicted. it may cause people to not have friends in real life leaving them feeling lonely and depressed. Those who are not able to form social interactions have been able to do so online, the internet being a blessing. But is it really? because of such actions, those individuals may never gain the confidence to face the real world and form meaningful interaction with the people outside as it is extremely important that young children have and extend real friendships in order to develop their own interpersonal skills. In conclusion, internet is one of the greatest thing mankind has brought upon this world. Depending on how we use it, it may bring us benefits as well as bring disadvantages with it. It may have made people isolated to some extent but it still has so much positive benefits as it unites people together in a way.
In the age of technology, individuals all over the globe are surfacing the
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web
, utilizing it to
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form
bonds with
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other
humans and expanding their circle. The internet has
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allowed
interaction and conversation between
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people
from any corner of the
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world
and giving a platform to voice our opinions and thoughts with millions of others.
However
, it has
also
made
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people
aloof and a shut-in, taking their ability to
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form
meaningful contact and giving them
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social
anxiety.

With the constant advancements in the field of online communication,
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social
media has minimized our distance and brought us closer by allowing us to text or message one another
easily
and
efficiently
as long as we have network. It has
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helped
us
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form
friendship with individuals from various nations and learn about their culture and traditions while
also
assisting in maintaining long distance relationships with family and significant
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other
. The
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web
has aided in finding
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ones
having similar interests and problems and enabled us to confide in the said
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other
person. It had made working easier by enabling colleagues to
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send
and receive information via electronic mails.
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Companies
can expand their business and grow their audience. More
importantly
,
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people
are becoming more aware of
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many
unfortunate
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events
occurring in the
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world
and sending their emotional and financial support with one click through message boards, campaign and relief websites, bringing mankind together in
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some
kind of way.

As there are
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many
advantages using the internet, it is not surprising to say there exists a
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negative
side too. Everyone is a minor celebrity having a tiny following on
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social
media platforms. It is more than easier in the
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current
state of the
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world
for
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people
to steal others identity and pretend as them. The deeper part of the
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web
, dark
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web
allowing
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people
to sell illegal items and explicit multimedia and
also
allowing
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people
to create their
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own
disturbing chat rooms. Most of us hate the
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idea
of confrontation as it exposes our vulnerable side.
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But
with the internet, we can remain anonymous while sharing our
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ideas
. It distances us from the
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real
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world
and
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gets
us addicted.
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it
may cause
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people
to not have friends in
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real
life leaving them feeling lonely and depressed. Those who are not able to
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form
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social
interactions have been able to do
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so
online, the internet being a blessing.
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But
is it
really
?
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because
of such actions, those individuals may never gain the confidence to face the
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real
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world
and
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form
meaningful interaction with the
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people
outside as it is
extremely
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important
that young children have and extend
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real
friendships in order to develop their
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own
interpersonal
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skills
.

In conclusion
, internet is one of the greatest thing mankind has brought upon this
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world
. Depending on how we
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use
it, it may bring us benefits
as well
as bring disadvantages with it. It may have made
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people
isolated to
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some
extent
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but
it
still
has
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so
much
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positive
benefits as it unites
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people
together in a way.
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IELTS essay An increasing number of people are now using the internet to meet new people and socialise. Some people think this has brought people closer together while others think people are becoming more isolated?

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