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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online? v.20

An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online? v. 20
Nowadays, The internet has impacted multiple spheres of human life. It provides us the services which make human life easier. Online shopping is one of the most impactful services which has been made possible by the internet. It has both advantages and disadvantages for individuals and companies. One of the most important benefits that online shopping has provided lies within its definition, that is, anyone can purchase anything within a few minutes. The purchased goods are delivered door to door and so there is no need for an individual to go and buy. It allows consumers to select the items they want from a wider range of products as goods are available from multiple vendors. Another advantage is that more employment opportunities have been created for both skilled and unskilled labour. For instance, skilled labour, such as engineers etc. , are employed for maintaining and improving the services of the e-commerce sites and some of the sections of unskilled labour gets employed as delivery partners. By putting the products online for purchase, the seller companies and local vendors get the benefit of better sales and revenue. However, like every coin has two sides, online shopping has some disadvantages as well. Because now multiple things are available just at one click, people are encouraged to buy stuff they do not actually need. Some studies show that the chances of the person to become a Shopaholic have been increased by 20 percent with the introduction of online shopping. Another disadvantage is that there are chances that a person will not like the product that has been ordered for multiple reasons such as colour is different or the quality of the product is not up to the mark. Thiss causes mental stress to the consumers. The sellers on the e-commerce sites have to pay them with certain amounts for each order and hence, there is the decrease of the profit. Multiple goods available for sale online are fake, but there is no way to check the authenticity of the product before purchase. As a result, there is a significant drop in the credibility of the company. To conclude, buying things online has numerous benefits and but the drawbacks should not be ignored. Both the consumers and companies must be aware of the malign practices and should be careful, so that they are not deceived.
Nowadays, The internet has impacted
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multiple
spheres of human life. It provides us the services which
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make
human life easier.
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Online
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shopping
is one of the most impactful services which has
been made
possible by the internet. It has both advantages and disadvantages for individuals and
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companies
.

One of the most
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important
benefits that
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online
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shopping
has provided lies within its definition,
that is
, anyone can
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purchase
anything within a few minutes. The
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purchased
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goods
are delivered
door to door and
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so
there is no need for an individual to go and
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buy
. It
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allows
consumers to select the items they want from a wider range of
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products
as
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goods
are available from
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multiple
vendors. Another advantage is that more employment opportunities have
been created
for both skilled and unskilled
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labour
.
For instance
, skilled
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labour
, such as engineers etc.
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,
are employed
for maintaining and improving the services of the e-commerce sites and
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some of the
sections of unskilled
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labour
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gets
employed as delivery partners. By putting the
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products
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online
for
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purchase
, the seller
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companies
and local vendors
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get
the benefit of better sales and revenue.

However
, like every coin has two sides,
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online
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shopping
has
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some
disadvantages
as well
.
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Because
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now
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multiple
things are available
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just
at one click,
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people
are encouraged
to
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buy
stuff they do not actually need.
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Some
studies
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show
that the chances of the person to become a Shopaholic have
been increased
by 20 percent with the introduction of
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online
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shopping
. Another disadvantage is that there are chances that a person will not like the
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product
that has
been ordered
for
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multiple
reasons such as
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colour
is
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different
or the quality of the
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product
is not up to the mark.
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Thiss
causes mental
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stress
to the consumers. The sellers on the e-commerce sites
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have to
pay them with certain amounts for each order and
hence
, there is the decrease of the profit.
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Multiple
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goods
available for sale
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online
are fake,
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but
there is no way to
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check
the authenticity of the
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product
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before
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purchase
.
As a result
, there is a significant drop in the credibility of the
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company
.

To conclude
, buying things
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online
has numerous benefits and
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but
the drawbacks should not be
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ignored
. Both the consumers and
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companies
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must
be aware of the malign practices and should be careful,
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so
that they are not deceived.
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IELTS essay An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online? v. 20

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
391 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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