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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online. v.13

An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online. v. 13
Technology has impacted every aspect of human life and shopping is no exception. The explosive growth of the internet and social media has led to the phenomenon of online shopping and tech savvy consumers are now fulfilling their needs through online shopping. Online shopping affects companies and consumers favourably and has various drawbacks as well. There are various benefits of online shopping for both buyer and seller. First and foremost is the convenience for the buyer A part from that, online business is also beneficial for the seller as it helps increase his sales and is also cost effective as there are no cost for operating the store and hiring staff. For instance, anyone can book an order online from the comforts of their living room without commuting to the store and waiting in long queues for payments. Moreover, the seller will enjoy more sales as he is operating 24 hours a day and 7 days a week and increased profits due to reduced operating cost. On the other hand, there are certain pitfalls of e commerce. There is always a risk of fraud which is a cause of concern for both the company and individual. For example, there are various cases of hacking, identity theft, phishing, counterfeit products and other scams that are quite common. Moreover, shipping problems and delays are also a challenge. For instance, a buyer might receive a damaged product or an order might be delivered to a wrong address. In a nutshell, there are various positive attributes of e commerce such as ease and convenience, cost effectiveness, profitability. On the flip side, it also comes with some downsides. However, the pace with which technology is making progress, it seems like online shopping would be more effective and advanced in the years to come.
Technology has impacted every aspect of human life and
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shopping
is no exception. The explosive growth of the internet and social media has led to the phenomenon of
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online
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shopping
and
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tech savvy
consumers are
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now
fulfilling their needs through
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online
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shopping
.
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Online
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shopping
affects
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companies
and consumers
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favourably
and has
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various
drawbacks
as well
.

There are
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various
benefits of
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online
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shopping
for both buyer and seller.
First
and foremost is the convenience for the buyer A part from that,
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online
business is
also
beneficial for the seller as it
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helps
increase his sales and is
also
cost effective as there are no cost for operating the store and hiring staff.
For instance
, anyone can book an order
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online
from the comforts of their living room without commuting to the store and waiting in long queues for payments.
Moreover
, the seller will enjoy more sales as he is operating 24 hours a day and 7 days a week and increased profits due to
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reduced
operating cost.

On the other hand
, there are certain pitfalls of
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e commerce
. There is always a
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risk
of fraud which is a cause of concern for both the
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company
and individual.
For example
, there are
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various
cases of hacking, identity theft, phishing, counterfeit products and other scams that are quite common.
Moreover
, shipping problems and delays are
also
a challenge.
For instance
, a buyer might receive a damaged product or an order might
be delivered
to a
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wrong
address.

In a nutshell, there are
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various
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positive
attributes of
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e commerce
such as
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ease
and convenience,
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cost effectiveness
, profitability. On the flip side, it
also
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comes
with
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some
downsides.
However
, the pace with which technology is making progress, it seems like
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online
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shopping
would be more effective and advanced in the years to
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come
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online. v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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