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Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue? v.15

Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue? v. 15
For the past few decades, we have observed a major shift in climatic conditions of planet Earth. Drift in the environmental system is largely due to global warming which has become an acute problem. This essay will analyse the root causes of global warming and will suggest remedies to lower the risk associated with this alarming problem. There are many causes of global warming, but it is mostly due to the greenhouse effect. The greenhouse effect is a phenomenon where gases such as carbon dioxide trap heat from the sun which causes the global temperature to rise above optimal level. Activities of human beings contribute equally to the increase of global warming. Factories and vehicles result in the emission of carbon gases and fumes which are depleting the ozone layer surrounding the earth. Utilisation of fossil fuels and other hazardous chemicals are other reasons of global warming. Moreover, countries are becoming more industrialised and are dumping waste into the atmosphere without realising its harmful effects and severity of the issue. Rising temperatures due to global warming would result in melting of polar ice-caps which will trigger severe floods, droughts and other extreme weather conditions. This critical issue which could potentially eliminate the human race should be death on government and individual level. Governments should enforce strict policies and regulations to control the emission of carbon gases from industries. More focus should be made on using alternative petroleum products that are environment-friendly. Industries that are certified green should be charged lower tax rate. Awareness programs should be organised to educate masses. Apart from government, individual members of the society should step forward and play their role. People should select green vehicles for their transportation requirement; they should dump the waste properly, prefer to work in green certified industries and educate others. To conclude, global warming poses a serious threat to mankind, wildlife and ecosystem of the planet. Governments and civilians both share equal responsibility to overcome this issue and make planet earth safer for mankind and other inhabitants.
For the past few decades, we have observed a major shift in climatic conditions of planet Earth. Drift in the environmental system is
largely
due to
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global
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warming
which has become an acute problem. This essay will
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analyse
the root causes of
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global
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warming
and will suggest remedies to lower the
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risk
associated with this alarming problem.

There are
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many
causes of
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global
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warming
,
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but
it is
mostly
due to the greenhouse effect. The greenhouse effect is a phenomenon where gases such as carbon dioxide trap heat from the sun which causes the
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global
temperature to rise above optimal level. Activities of human beings contribute
equally
to the increase of
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global
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warming
. Factories and vehicles result in the emission of carbon gases and fumes which are depleting the ozone layer surrounding the earth.
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Utilisation
of fossil fuels and
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other
hazardous chemicals are
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other
reasons of
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global
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warming
.
Moreover
, countries are becoming more
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industrialised
and are dumping waste into the atmosphere without
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realising
its harmful effects and severity of the issue. Rising temperatures due to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
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warming
would result in melting of polar ice-caps which will trigger severe floods, droughts and
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other
extreme weather conditions.

This critical issue which could
potentially
eliminate the human race should be death on
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government
and individual level.
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Governments
should enforce strict policies and regulations to control the emission of carbon gases from industries. More focus should
be made
on using alternative petroleum products that are environment-friendly. Industries that
are certified
green should
be charged
lower tax rate. Awareness programs should be
Possible spelling mistake. 'organised' is British English.
organised
to educate masses. Apart from
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government
, individual members of the society should step forward and play their role.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
should select green vehicles for their transportation requirement; they should dump the waste
properly
, prefer to work in green certified industries and educate others.

To conclude
,
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global
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warming
poses a serious threat to mankind, wildlife and ecosystem of the planet.
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Governments
and civilians both share equal responsibility to overcome this issue and
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make
planet earth safer for mankind and
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other
inhabitants.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Global warming is one of the most serious issues that the world is facing today. What are the causes of global warming and what measures can governments and individuals take to tackle the issue? v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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