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An email about attending the talk on importance of growing trees

An email about attending the talk on importance of growing trees GNJGe
From: Jasmine Subject: Hi, Good to hear from you, Indrani. I am getting on well, thanks! I have just finished my school exam last week, so I am quite free to join you with the talk. Yes, I do enjoy gardening indeed especially growing the flowering plants! It just makes me feel contented when seeing them growing well. However, I have never been growing trees before as this would requires a large amount of space for growing them and I don’t have the knowledge in plating trees as well. I am indeed interested to know the ways and methods to preserve nature as the environmental pollution is getting more serious and critical nowadays due to human’s activity unfortunately. Therefore, it very important to create awareness in people today in protecting and preserving the environment. I definitely interested to attend the talk on global warming with you! I have always been concerning about this issue and want to know more about it. Let’s join these talks together, I really looking forward for them! See you soon! Jasmine.
From: Jasmine

Subject:

Hi,

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Indrani
. I am getting on well, thanks! I have
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finished my school exam last week,
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so
I am quite free to
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join
you with the talk.

Yes, I do enjoy gardening
indeed
especially
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growing
the flowering plants! It
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just
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makes
me feel contented when seeing them
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growing
well.
However
, I have never been
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growing
trees
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before
as this would
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requires
a large amount of space for
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growing
them and I don’t have the knowledge in plating trees
as well
.

I am
indeed
interested to know the ways and methods to preserve nature as the environmental pollution is getting more serious and critical nowadays due to human’s activity unfortunately.
Therefore
,
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it
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very
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important
to create awareness in
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people
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today
in protecting and preserving the environment.

I definitely interested to attend the talk on global warming with you! I have always
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been concerning
about this issue and want to know more about it.
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Let
’s
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join
these talks together, I
really
looking forward for them!

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See
you
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Jasmine.
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IELTS essay An email about attending the talk on importance of growing trees

Essay
  American English
9 paragraphs
176 words
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