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An early memory that you had as a kid

An early memory that you had as a kid GwpDg
The title of my talk is a bad visit to my neighbors. Some of my earliest memories was when I went to my neighbors’ house to play with their daughter, who was 2 years older than me, so I’d like to share a particular memory about that. It’s a not-so-good memory that still exists in my mind after 10 years. I was about 5 years old at that time and still went to kindergarten, so I had Saturday off every week. However, since the rest of my family didn’t, they often let my come and play with my 7-year-old neighbor,  Giang. She and I got along very well, but sometimes argued about kids’ stuff. Anyway, one day, I came to her house and realized there weren’t only me and Giang. There was also Van Anh, who was Giang’s relative and at the same age as me. I knew her a little as she lived near my house but hadn’t played or talked to her at all. So, obviously, I couldn’t know that she was often teased as a duck (maybe because she was quite plump). I have never known the reason why my beloved neighbor told Van Anh that I had called her ‘duck’, which was completely a lie. I was such a timid little girl that I just let her say what she liked without opposing. Finally, she and Van Anh talked with each other the whole morning and I ended up sitting lonely in the living room. Now, Giang and I are still friends but not so closed as we used to be when we were kids. She is taking university entry exam in a few days and I truly hope she will get a good result.
The title of my talk is a
bad
visit to my neighbors.

Some
of my earliest memories was when I went to my neighbors’
house
to play with their daughter, who was 2 years older than me,
so
I’d like to share a particular memory about that. It’s a not-
so
-
good
memory that
still
exists in my mind after 10 years.

I was about 5 years
old
at that time and
still
went to kindergarten,
so
I had Saturday off every week.
However
, since the rest of my family didn’t, they
often
let
my
come
and play with my 7-year-
old
neighbor,
 
Giang
. She and I
got
along
very
well,
but
sometimes
argued about kids’ stuff.

Anyway, one day, I came to her
house
and realized there weren’t
only
me and 
Giang
. There was
also
Van
Anh
, who was
Giang
’s relative and at the same age as me. I knew her a 
little
 as she
lived
near my
house
but
hadn’t played or talked to her at all.
So
,
obviously
, I couldn’t know that she was
often
teased as a duck (maybe 
because
she was quite plump). I have never known the reason why my beloved neighbor
told
Van
Anh
that I had called her ‘duck’, which was completely a lie. I was such a timid
little
girl that I
just
let
her say what she liked without opposing.
Finally
, she and Van
Anh
talked with each other the whole morning and I ended up sitting lonely in the living room.

Now
,
Giang
and I are
still
friends
but
not
so
closed as we
used
to be when we were kids. She is taking university entry exam in a few days and I
truly
hope she will
get
a
good
result.
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IELTS essay An early memory that you had as a kid

Essay
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5 paragraphs
280 words
5.5
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