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Although tourists in many countries are a significant source of revenue, they are frowned upon for various reasons. For the tourist, however, traveling is supposed to broaden the mind and be an educational experience. Use your own ideas, knowledge, and experience and support your arguments with example and relevant evidence.

Although tourists in many countries are a significant source of revenue, they are frowned upon for various reasons. For the tourist, however, traveling is supposed to broaden the mind and be an educational experience. Use your own ideas, knowledge, and experience and support your arguments with example and relevant evidence. Nb3b
It is an undeniable fact that tourist spots in every country have become more popular and have so many visitors. The development of tourism has so many benefits, such as more income from tourists and exposure of culture, although the drawbacks of this development cannot be ignored. This essay discusses the drawbacks of tourism for such countries followed by relevant examples. I agree that the disadvantages of the tourism should be handled prudently to lessen its adverse effects on a country. Firstly, tourism activities can threaten the traditional culture of a country. Local people tend to imitate the cultures that are brought by the tourists from their home countries. Based on a cultural research conducted in Indonesia last year, local people stated that their traditional cultures are not suitable to the modern era, whereas the cultures brought by tourists to their country are more suitable and modern. For example, more local people like wearing modern clothes rather than traditional one as well as they follow more modern dances than the traditional one. Secondly, tourism can cause the bad effect to the environment. Take littering cases as an example. It is irrefutable fact that so many tourists ignore the policy about rubbish. Bali as a tourism destination, besides getting awards because of the successful tourism, this city is well-known for the rubbish as well. The government face the difficulty in handling this littering problem because the increasing number of tourists each year. Then, the local people get the effect to their environment, such as land pollution, flood, and air pollution because of the waste. On the other hand, tourism can increase the national government income from tourists' visa and local people get the work-field as well as the chance to learn other cultures. For instance, local people can build home stay area for tourist and gain income from that business. It can reduce the number of unemployment people and grow knowledge of local people about tourists' language. Based on the previous explanation, we can conclude that tourism will be the threat for local cultures and environment, even though it is good for gaining income for government and local people as well as create a chance for local people to have job and knowledge.
It is an undeniable fact that
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spots in every
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country
have become more popular and have
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so
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many
visitors. The development of
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tourism
has
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so
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many
benefits, such as more
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income
from
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tourists
and exposure of
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culture
, although the drawbacks of this development cannot be
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ignored
. This essay discusses the drawbacks of
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tourism
for such
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countries
followed by relevant examples. I
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agree
that the disadvantages of the
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tourism
should
be handled
prudently
to lessen its adverse effects on a country.

Firstly
,
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activities can threaten the
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traditional
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culture
of a
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country
.
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Local
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people
tend to imitate the
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cultures
that
are brought
by the
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tourists
from their home
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countries
. Based on a cultural research conducted in Indonesia last year,
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local
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people
stated that their
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traditional
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cultures
are not suitable to the
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modern
era, whereas the
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cultures
brought by
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tourists
to their
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country
are more suitable and
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modern
.
For example
, more
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local
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people
like wearing
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modern
clothes
rather
than
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traditional
one as
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well
as they follow more
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modern
dances than the
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traditional
one.

Secondly
,
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can cause the
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bad
effect to the environment. Take littering cases as an example. It is irrefutable fact that
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so
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many
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tourists
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ignore
the policy about rubbish. Bali as a
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tourism
destination,
besides
getting awards
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because
of the successful
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tourism
, this city is well-known for the rubbish as
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well
. The
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government
face the difficulty in handling this littering problem
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because
the increasing number of
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tourists
each year. Then, the
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local
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people
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get
the effect to their environment, such as land pollution, flood, and air pollution
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because
of the waste.

On the other hand
,
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tourism
can increase the national
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government
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income
from tourists' visa and
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local
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people
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get
the work-field as
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well
as the chance to learn other
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cultures
.
For instance
,
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local
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people
can build home stay area for
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tourist
and gain
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income
from that business. It can
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reduce
the number of unemployment
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people
and grow knowledge of
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local
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people
about tourists' language.

Based on the previous explanation, we can conclude that
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tourism
will be the threat for
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local
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cultures
and environment,
even though
it is
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good
for gaining
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income
for
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government
and
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local
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as
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as create a chance for
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local
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people
to have job and knowledge.
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IELTS essay Although tourists in many countries are a significant source of revenue, they are frowned upon for various reasons. For the tourist, however, traveling is supposed to broaden the mind and be an educational experience. Use your own ideas, knowledge, and experience and support your arguments with example and relevant evidence.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
372 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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