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Although more and more people read the news on the Internet newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people Do you agree or disagree with that statement v.2

Although more and more people read the news on the Internet newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people v. 2
By the end of the 19th century, and the beginning of the 20th century, the newspaper industry with the advent of the New York Times, has grown tremendously and played an important role in providing news to readers. But nowadays, in my opinion, the development of online newspapers in particular, the internet in general, brings many new aspects to journalism. First and foremost, online newspapers have the ability to store huge information, whether old or new. And with the presence of the Internet around almost every corner of the world, people with a portable device such as a mobile phone can get access to huge storage of news. Therefore, readers want to look up, learn about events, news that happened for a long time ago is completely possible to perform by simple operations. By contrast, with prolonging procedures including editing and printing, a traditional newspaper might not be able to compete with the Internet in terms of updating speed. In addition, high interaction is an indispensable advantage of online newspapers and makes an important contribution to the transmission of information to readers. The electronic newspaper not only offers articles by journalists and reporters but also immediately receives feedback from readers through the comment lines under each reader’s article. It can be seen that the online newspaper is a public forum that journalists and readers can exchange and share frankly about a problem in society. This is a feature that traditional (printed) newspapers cannot do and is only one-way interaction to people: reading. The ultimate advantage of online newspapers is that information from around the world is updated regularly. Meanwhile, the printed press is limited to a certain area and scope and is difficult to update. And the best advantage of online newspapers is that people will not have to spend money on buying monthly newspapers. In conclusion, I disagree that the printed newspapers would continue to be the most crucial ( greatest) source of information because the more people turn to online newspapers for its benefits, the more difficult the traditional newspaper is
By the
end
of the 19th century, and the beginning of the 20th century, the
newspaper
industry with the advent of the
New
York Times, has grown
tremendously
and played an
important
role in providing
news
to readers.
But
nowadays, in my opinion, the development of
online
newspapers
in particular
, the internet
in general
, brings
many
new
aspects to journalism.

First
and foremost,
online
newspapers
have the ability to store huge
information
, whether
old
or
new
. And with the presence of the Internet around almost every corner of the world,
people
with a portable device such as a mobile phone can
get
access to huge storage of
news
.
Therefore
, readers want to look up, learn about
events
,
news
that happened for a long time ago is completely possible to perform by simple operations. By contrast, with prolonging procedures including editing and printing, a traditional
newspaper
might not be able to compete with the Internet in terms of updating speed.

In addition
, high interaction is an indispensable advantage of
online
newspapers
and
makes
an
important
contribution to the transmission of
information
to readers. The electronic
newspaper
not
only
offers articles by journalists and reporters
but
also
immediately receives feedback from readers through the comment lines under each reader’s article. It can be
seen
that the
online
newspaper
is a public forum that journalists and readers can exchange and share
frankly
about a problem in society. This is a feature that traditional (printed)
newspapers
cannot do and is
only
one-way interaction to
people
: reading.

The ultimate advantage of
online
newspapers
is that
information
from around the world
is updated
regularly
. Meanwhile, the printed press
is limited
to a certain area and scope and is difficult to update.

And the best advantage of
online
newspapers
is that
people
will not
have to
spend money on buying monthly newspapers.

In conclusion
, I disagree that the printed
newspapers
would continue to be the most crucial
(
greatest) source of
information
because
the more
people
turn to
online
newspapers
for its benefits, the more difficult the traditional
newspaper
is
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Although more and more people read the news on the Internet newspaper will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people v. 2

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
342 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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