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Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. Do you agree or disagree? v.3

Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. v. 3
It is true that in the modern world people have a tendency to read online newspapers. While I believe that reading news on the Internet can bring people up to date with what had happened effectively, I also believe that printed newspaper is a better way to gather information. On the one hand, there are several reasons why online newspapers are in preference to printed ones. Firstly, online newspapers can provide people with regular news updates. The latest news can be spread on the Internet at the time some events take place, as a result, users can quickly obtain up-to-date information. Take a football match as an example. The match score is updated only a few seconds after a player scored a goal so that people can catch up on the match easier. Secondly, online newspapers can lighten the financial burden for both readers and publishers. The publishers can reduce the amount of ink and paper to print the newspapers. Readers can get the news that is free of charge with their phones or computers instead of buying the paper. On the other hand, it is wrong to reject the argument in favor of printed newspapers. Firstly, the papers can provide a major source of news of high quality. Each item of news is classified more carefully and thoroughly in printed newspapers than those on the Internet due to the money they cost. Secondly, reading the papers can remain a healthy way for readers to gain information. Reading news on the Internet over phones or computers can inflict damage to people's eyes while printed papers are harmless. In conclusion, it is ludicrous to compare online newspapers with printed ones because they are equally important.
It is true that in the modern world
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people
have a tendency to read
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online
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newspapers
. While I believe that reading
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news
on the Internet can bring
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people
up to date with what had happened
effectively
, I
also
believe that
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printed
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newspaper
is a better way to gather information.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why
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online
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newspapers
are in preference to
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printed
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ones
.
Firstly
,
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online
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newspapers
can provide
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people
with regular
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news
updates. The latest
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news
can
be spread
on the Internet at the time
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some
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events
take place,
as a result
, users can
quickly
obtain up-to-date information. Take a football match as an example. The match score
is updated
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only
a few seconds after a player scored a goal
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so
that
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people
can catch up on the match easier.
Secondly
,
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online
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newspapers
can lighten the financial burden for both readers and publishers. The publishers can
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reduce
the amount of ink and paper to print the
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newspapers
. Readers can
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get
the
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news
that is
free of charge with their phones or computers
instead
of buying the paper.

On the other hand
, it is
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wrong
to reject the argument in favor of
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printed
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newspapers
.
Firstly
, the papers can provide a major source of
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news
of high quality. Each item of
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news
is classified
more
carefully
and
thoroughly
in
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printed
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newspapers
than those on the Internet due to the money they cost.
Secondly
, reading the papers can remain a healthy way for readers to gain information. Reading
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news
on the Internet over phones or computers can inflict damage to
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people
's eyes while
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printed
papers are harmless.

In conclusion
, it is ludicrous to compare
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online
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newspapers
with
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printed
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ones
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because
they are
equally
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important
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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