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Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.19

It is true that a growing number of people are using the Internet in order to find out the latest news. While newspapers are still popular, I strongly disagree that most people will continue to rely on them as a source of news. The first reason for my view relates to the increasing use of the Internet around the world. Recently, a growing number of people have accessed online news via technological gadgets such as smart phones or tablets, so they do not need to buy a newspaper to obtain news. Even in more remote corners of the world, access to the Internet is becoming more widespread and the online community is growing daily. Secondly, online news is always up-to-date while printed news needs time for editing, printing and delivering. In this fast changing world, readers tend to expect updated information about what has just happened or is happening around them. Online news can be broadcast immediately with vivid pictures and relevant stories, making it more appealing to readers than printed news. Finally, the Internet is a repository of information for people to dig for information that they need. Digital information can be stored in mass quantity, which allows internet users to search for events that occurred in the past. In contrast, newspapers are generally hard to preserve because of the corrosive effects of the environment and their sheer bulk makes storage difficult. This once again confirms the edge of online news. In conclusion, I firmly believe that the Internet is even now replacing newspaper as the principal medium or accessing all the latest news.
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people
are using the Internet in order to find out the latest
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news
. While
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newspapers
are
still
popular, I
strongly
disagree that most
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people
will continue to rely on them as a source of news.

The
first
reason for my view relates to the increasing
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use
of the Internet around the world. Recently, a growing number of
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people
have accessed
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online
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news
via technological gadgets such as
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smart phones
or tablets,
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so
they do not need to
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buy
a
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newspaper
to obtain
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news
. Even in more remote corners of the world, access to the Internet is becoming more widespread and the
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online
community is growing daily.

Secondly
,
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online
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news
is always up-to-date while printed
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news
needs time for editing, printing and delivering. In this
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fast
changing world, readers tend to
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expect
updated
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information
about what has
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just
happened or is happening around them.
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Online
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news
can be broadcast immediately with vivid pictures and relevant stories, making it more appealing to readers than printed news.

Finally
, the Internet is a repository of
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information
for
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people
to dig for
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information
that they need. Digital
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information
can
be stored
in mass quantity, which
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allows
internet users to search for
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events
that occurred in the past.
In contrast
,
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newspapers
are
generally
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hard
to preserve
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because
of the corrosive effects of the environment and their sheer bulk
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makes
storage difficult. This once again confirms the edge of
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online
news.

In conclusion
, I
firmly
believe that the Internet is even
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now
replacing
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newspaper
as the principal medium or accessing all the latest
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news
.
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IELTS essay Although more and more people read the news on internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
265 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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