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Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.13

Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. v. 13
Reading news on the internet or newspaper for major people have been a heated topic constantly. There is a common notion that newspapers are still the most vital source despite the innovation that the internet has brought to the information provision process. Newspapers remain an important source of news for several reasons. The first of these is that the older generation still prefer to read their news this way, which is because they have traditionally bought a paper over the years and so do not wish to change or simply do not know how to do so online in some cases. So, this a journal also comes with other supplements, such as magazines and television guides and sources of entertainment such as crosswords. However, though newspaper may not disappear completely, the internet is likely to become the dominant cause of news over time. This is primarily because younger people tend to read the news online and prefer not to pay for it, so those reading newspapers, the older generations, will gradually decline. This links in with the second reason, which is that as media companies start to see a drop in income from newspapers, printing them will become unprofitable and they will be forced to find ways to make money from news online. Plus, the audience, with an internet-connected device, is allowed to access news under the form of video clips, which are by no means available on newspapers. Additionally, the Internet will replace newspapers as the most important source of news in the foreseeable future. In conclusion, although newspapers remain popular today, they will gradually be replaced by the desire to read the news through electronic sources. This may be a sad loss given their history, but unfortunately it is an unavoidable development.
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news
on the internet or
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newspaper
for major
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people
have been a heated topic
constantly
. There is a common notion that
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newspapers
are
still
the most vital
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source
despite the innovation that the internet has brought to the information provision process.

Newspapers remain an
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important
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source
of
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news
for several reasons. The
first
of these is that the older generation
still
prefer to read their
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news
this way, which is
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because
they have
traditionally
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bought
a paper over the years and
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so
do not wish to
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change
or
simply
do not know how to do
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so
online in
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some
cases.
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, this a journal
also
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comes
with other supplements, such as magazines and television guides and
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sources
of entertainment such as crosswords.

However
, though
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newspaper
may not disappear completely, the internet is likely to become the dominant cause of
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news
over time. This is
primarily
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because
younger
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people
tend to read the
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news
online and prefer not to pay for it,
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so
those reading
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newspapers
, the older generations, will
gradually
decline. This links in with the second reason, which is that as media
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companies
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start
to
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see
a drop in income from
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newspapers
, printing them will become
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unprofitable and
they will
be forced
to find ways to
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make
money from
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news
online. Plus, the audience, with an internet-connected device, is
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allowed
to access
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news
under the form of video clips, which are by no means available on
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newspapers
.
Additionally
, the Internet will replace
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newspapers
as the most
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important
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source
of
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news
in the foreseeable future.

In conclusion
, although
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newspapers
remain popular
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today
, they will
gradually
be replaced
by the desire to read the
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news
through electronic
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sources
. This may be a sad loss
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given
their history,
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but
unfortunately it is an unavoidable development.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Although more and more people read news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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