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Almost every school works with end devices because

Almost every school works with end devices because R0Rr8
Almost every school works with end devices because it simplifies a lot of things or adds more structure to the system. That is why many students and teachers ask themselves whether you should take devices with you to school yourself or whether you should have them provided by the school. I am of the opinion that you should take devices with you to school because you are already familiar with your system. Also, it can perform better than a school laptop because it has been a long time saving on it. In addition, you don't have to worry about breaking the device, as it is your own property. Furthermore, you could buy apps that help you with school and still have it on your laptop after school. Students who may not have the financial means to buy one should get one from the school. A disadvantage might be that you have games on your laptop and not take part in the class, but each student has to decide for himself whether he wants to have good grades or not.
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IELTS essay Almost every school works with end devices because

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
179 words
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