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All over the world, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer.

All over the world, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer. VlW86
On a global scale, wealthy people are getting wealthier and poor people are getting poorer. In my point of view, the issue is with income unfairness, government regulations, and community traditions. the only way to find a solution to poverty is to abolish this restriction and avoid our cultural judgment. Income unfairness is wide- range. Mostly historical, political or religious interfere such as war, epidemics, and other natural or non-natural disasters. Also, governments are doing their best to close or shorter these gaps but it seems harder than we think. When the gap is created Crime will increase and other social problems will so. There are many ways to overcome these issues by creating a more fair system for everyone and stable social community management. Someone who held the opposing view would say that history politics or religion has nothing to deal with that. For example, Canada is one of the best countries in the world with multifaith and politics but it still has a strong governmental system and high income for individuals. Also one lowest the country with the world in government corruption. this is because of the. this is due to their social management and their senior executive are well managed. World wide range, rich people are increasing their self income in a desperate way and poor people are significantly drooping down their financial status. In my opinion, these problems are with income inequality, government policies, and social-cultural. the way to solve these problems is to avoid these rules and our traditional behavior.
On a global scale, wealthy
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people
are getting wealthier and poor
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people
are getting poorer. In my point of view, the issue is with
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income
unfairness,
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government
regulations, and community traditions.
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the
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only
way to find a solution to poverty is to abolish this restriction and avoid our cultural judgment.

Income unfairness is wide- range.
Mostly
historical, political or religious interfere such as war, epidemics, and other natural or non-natural disasters.
Also
,
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governments
are doing their best to close or shorter these gaps
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but
it seems harder than we
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think
. When the gap
is created
Crime will increase and other social problems will
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so
. There are
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many
ways to overcome these issues by creating a more
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fair
system for everyone and stable social community management.

Someone who held the opposing view would say that history politics or religion has nothing to deal with that.
For example
, Canada is one of the best countries in the world with
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multifaith
and politics
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but
it
still
has a strong governmental system and high
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income
for individuals.
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Also
one lowest the country with the world in
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government
corruption.
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this
is
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because
of
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the.
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this
is due to their social management and their senior executive are well managed.

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range, rich
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people
are increasing their self
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income
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in a desperate way
and poor
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people
are
significantly
drooping down their financial status. In my opinion, these problems are with
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income
inequality,
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government
policies, and social-cultural.
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the
way to solve these problems is to avoid these
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rules
and our traditional behavior.

IELTS essay All over the world, the rich are becoming richer and the poor are becoming poorer.

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255 words
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