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AFFECT OF CARE AND NURSING HOMES

It is increasingly common for families to send their elderly relatives to live in nursing homes or care homes, rather than take care of them at home. We will discuss several drawbacks rather than advantages. Firstly, I would like to say elderly people do face some problems in nursing homes or care homes for the elderly present some disadvantages. For instance, the most obvious of them is the lack of loved ones around, and being isolated from their lovely and usual environment can make them feel lonely and sad. This can result in psychological trauma and moodiness and also increased chances of contracting infectious diseases as the majority of the elderly people have comparatively weakened immune systems. In addition, despite the fact that it is possible that for friends and relatives to visit nursing home residents, these visits can be infrequent, and loneliness is often the consequence. Secondly, another disadvantage is staying in nursing homes or care homes can be very costly. Many people can not afford to pay for constant care, especially if they do not have plenty of retirement savings. Finally, I think one of the most important disadvantages is that people often put their elderly relatives in care homes or nursing homes that are situated a long distance from their homes. As a result, they meet each other less frequently. Overall, living in a care home or nursing home has many negative aspects to consider. In summary, I should say that I am sure that elderly people feel sorrowful when they are placed in nursing homes or care homes, and I feel this, therefore, putting the elderly in nursing homes or care homes is unacceptable, at least for me.
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increasingly
common for families to
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send
their
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elderly
relatives to
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live
in nursing
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homes
or
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care
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homes
,
rather
than take
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care
of them at home. We will discuss several drawbacks
rather
than advantages.

Firstly
, I would like to say
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elderly
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people
do face
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some
problems in nursing
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homes
or
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care
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homes
for the
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elderly
present
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some
disadvantages.
For instance
, the most obvious of them is the lack of
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loved
ones around, and
being isolated
from their lovely and usual environment can
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make
them feel lonely and sad. This can result in psychological trauma and moodiness and
also
increased chances of contracting infectious diseases as the majority of the
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elderly
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people
have
comparatively
weakened immune systems.
In addition
, despite the fact that it is possible that for friends and relatives to visit nursing home residents, these visits can be infrequent, and loneliness is
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often
the consequence.

Secondly
, another disadvantage is staying in nursing
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homes
or
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care
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homes
can be
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very
costly.
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people
can not afford to pay for constant
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care
,
especially
if they do not have
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plenty
of retirement savings.

Finally
, I
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think
one of the most
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important
disadvantages is that
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people
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often
put their
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elderly
relatives in
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care
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homes
or nursing
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homes
that
are situated
a long distance from their
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homes
.
As a result
, they
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meet
each other less
frequently
.
Overall
, living in a
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care
home or nursing home has
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many
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negative
aspects to consider.

In summary, I should say that I am sure that
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elderly
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people
feel sorrowful when they
are placed
in nursing
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homes
or
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care
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homes
, and I feel this,
therefore
, putting the
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elderly
in nursing
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homes
or
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care
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homes
is unacceptable, at least for me.
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IELTS essay AFFECT OF CARE AND NURSING HOMES

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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