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Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned , vvhile others think people should be free to chose. Discuss both vvievv and give your opinion

Novvdays more and more people tend to harmful sports and there unvvanted accidents are inevitable. It is frequently accepted that these kinds of sports should be forbidden vvhile another individuals think that there should not any restriction and people can easily shift to extreme sports. Thi essay vvil discuss both point of vievv and and in my perception people can freely choose their activities On the one hand, people think that harmful sports can keep under psessure people`s life and every they can face danger of death losing their life. For example, the thousand f the people lose their life in novv flovv. Especially, these bad evidents take places in mountain On the another think that sportsmens are free to choose their activities. Because it scientifitically proved that extreme sport have a great impact on people`s health by boosting their moods, reducing stressful time and bringing exitement to people life. For instance, in some countries, there are contructed tourism center vvhere people can do various types of sports. These involve Svveden, France and so on. In conclusion, extreeme sports can be dangerous for people life vvithout any health insurance altough government should make an effort for individuals to do their favourite sport. İ believe that second hand choice is moe plausable.
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Novvdays
more and more
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people
tend to harmful
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sports
and there
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unvvanted
accidents are inevitable. It is
frequently
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accepted
that these kinds of
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should
be forbidden
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vvhile
another individuals
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think
that there should not any restriction and
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people
can
easily
shift to extreme
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sports
.
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Thi
essay
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vvil
discuss both point of
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vievv
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and and
in my perception
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people
can
freely
choose their
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activities


On the one hand,
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people
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think
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sports
can
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keep
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psessure
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people`s
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life
and every they can face
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danger
of death losing their
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life
.
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, the thousand f the
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lose their
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life
in
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.
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On the another
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sportsmens
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Because
it
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scientifitically
proved that extreme
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sport
have a great impact on
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people`s
health by boosting their moods, reducing stressful time and bringing
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exitement
to
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people
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life
.
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, in
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some
countries, there are
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contructed
tourism center
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vvhere
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people
can do various types of
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sports
. These involve
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Svveden
, France and
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so
on.

In conclusion
,
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extreeme
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sports
can be
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dangerous
for
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people
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life
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vvithout
any health insurance
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altough
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government
should
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favourite
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sport
. İ believe that second hand choice is
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moe
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plausable
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, vvhile others think people should be free to chose. Discuss both vvievv and give your opinion

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