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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.42

Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 42
There has been an ongoing debate on who will nurture the child. Some people perceive that it is the responsibility of parents by inculcating good decorum which helps them to become a good member of society. However, others opine that this would be done by the academic institute. The essay will discuss my stance with arguments in below paragraphs. To begin with, the predominant reason for allocating the responsibility to train the juvenile given to their ancestors is that they are the creator. As they have some perception about their juvenile, so they can provide them with a proper guidance. Moreover, a little one can spend a lot of time with them. During that they observe the behaviour of their parents from that they also learn. However, to teach moral values sometimes parents should also change their certain actions. Even some of the skills are coming into the child by born, so parents can easily encourage them to adapt better information. For example, by telling their family history and their social respect, a juvenile can easily learn about the behaviour. On the other hand, some people opine that the learning of good behaviour is done in the school. Firstly, the pupils has the fear of their teacher. Even they think that if they were not obeying the rules then punished by their faculty. Furthermore, another reason is that teacher having more capability to explain the situation by giving the proper example. At last, they can also motivate them by giving the prize to an individual as per their behaviour. For instance, most of the school is delivering an award in their annual function to the disciplined student. In conclusion, as per my opinion, to inculcate good behaviour in a child is the responsibility of both the parents and schools. As both having a different stand in the child’s life. But, both can play an equal role to make them a good person.
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people
perceive that it is the responsibility of
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parents
by inculcating
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good
decorum which
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helps
them to become a
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good
member of society.
However
, others opine that this would
be done
by the academic institute. The essay will discuss my stance with arguments in below paragraphs.

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given
to their ancestors is that they are the creator. As they have
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some
perception about their juvenile,
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so
they can provide them with a proper guidance.
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, a
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one can spend
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a lot of
time with them. During that they observe the
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behaviour
of their
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parents
from that they
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learn.
However
, to teach moral values
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sometimes
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parents
should
also
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change
their certain actions. Even
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some of the
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skills
are coming into the
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child
by born,
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so
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parents
can
easily
encourage them to adapt better information.
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, by telling their family history and their social respect, a juvenile can
easily
learn about the
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behaviour
.

On the other hand
,
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people
opine that the learning of
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good
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behaviour
is done
in the school.
Firstly
, the pupils has the fear of their teacher. Even they
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think
that if they were not obeying the
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rules
then punished by their faculty.
Furthermore
, another reason is that teacher having more capability to
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explain
the situation by giving the proper example. At last, they can
also
motivate them by giving the prize to an individual as per their
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behaviour
.
For instance
, most of the school is delivering an award in their annual function to the disciplined student.

In conclusion
, as per my opinion, to inculcate
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good
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behaviour
in a
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child
is the responsibility of both the
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parents
and schools.
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As
both having a
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stand in the
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child’s
life.
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, both can play an equal role to
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make
them a
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good
person.
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IELTS essay Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. v. 42

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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