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Advertisements are good or not in schools.

Advertisements are good or not in schools. 2bD6k
Advertisements are good or not in schools. It is a fact that advertisements it is one of the most useful strategies in the world of today, but it is schools a place to use them. Firstly, for public schools it is a successful way to gain money, that lead them to make investments, such as good materials, tools and programs for their students. However a young student can be easily manipulated by what they seen in their daily life. Secondly, schools need to be very carefully on decide what type of company they choose to work with. In fact, their students are still in development and can be influeced by these advertisements. Thirdly, in my opinion advertisement can be a great solution, also schools can choose to work with companies that deal with topics like healthy food as well as other themes like universities or topic that can be useful for their students. To conclude, how I said before, I think advertisments could be a good options for public schools not only because it can make them gain money but also because it can be a uselful tool to influence students.
Advertisements are
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good
or not in schools.

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today
,
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it is
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schools
a place to
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use
them.

Firstly
, for public
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schools
it is a successful way to gain money, that lead them to
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make
investments, such as
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good
materials, tools and programs for their
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students
.
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However
a young
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student
can be
easily
manipulated by what they
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seen
in their daily life.

Secondly
,
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schools
need to be
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very
carefully
on decide what type of
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company
they choose to work with. In fact, their
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students
are
still
in development and can be
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influeced
by these advertisements.

Thirdly
, in my opinion advertisement can be a great solution,
also
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schools
can choose to work with
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companies
that deal with topics like healthy food
as well
as other themes like universities or topic that can be useful for their students.

To conclude
, how I said
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before
, I
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think
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advertisments
could be a
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good
options for public
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schools
not
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only
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because
it can
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make
them gain money
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but
also
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it can be
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uselful
tool to influence
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IELTS essay Advertisements are good or not in schools.

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
191 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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