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Advantages of two or three sports or hobbies to get kids interested in them so that they will spend less time with their gadgets.

Advantages of two or three sports or hobbies to get kids interested in them so that they will spend less time with their gadgets. YBoJn
In the digital world, kids can found a variety of things that can engage them. So the main goal should be not to get rid of gadgets, but to replace child interest inside those devices with the same interest in the real world. For instance, board games could replace digital games. It will be better for socializing and developing strategic thinking. As a replacement to watching videos of strangers doing things, we can propose to do that by ourselves: to make a science experiment, to shot a short movie, to print fancy mechanisms on a 3D printer, to dance, etc. It will increase the chances to find innate talents and develop an interest in a particular hobby. Of course, parents have to take part in these activities. Moreover, they should be a role model. And only this way we can draw the attention of kids to activities we want them to do.
In the digital world, kids can
found
a variety of things that can engage them.
So
the main goal should be not to
get
rid of gadgets,
but
to replace child interest inside those devices with the same interest in the real world.

For instance
, board games could replace digital games. It will be better for socializing and developing strategic thinking. As a replacement to watching videos of strangers doing things, we can propose to do that by ourselves: to
make
a science experiment,
to shot
a short movie, to print fancy mechanisms on a 3D printer, to dance, etc. It will increase the chances to find innate talents and develop an interest in a particular hobby.

Of course
, parents
have to
take part
in these activities.
Moreover
, they should be a role model. And
only
this way we can draw the attention of kids to activities we want them to do.
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IELTS essay Advantages of two or three sports or hobbies to get kids interested in them so that they will spend less time with their gadgets.

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3 paragraphs
152 words
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