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Advantages of home schooling and learning from school

Advantages of home schooling and learning from school Ag5N1
As per the existing floor plan we 1st enter the ball through the main stairs. We then proceed towards the kitchen which is separated by an internal wall. The kitchen is located on the right from the main entrance. As we move out of the kitchen we need to pass through an internal door. We then come to the storage which is located under the stairs. We then have the living room which is separated from the storage by an internal wall. Now looking at the proposed changes, We continue to enter through the main entrance. The storage and stairs would be modified. The storage space would be increased to make room for more storage of different items. As we enter from the main entrance, we pass the internal door which leads us to the kitchen. The internal wall separates the staircase and kitchen. Unlike the existing plan the internal wall is now demolished and the living room is accessible from the main entrance.
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As
per the existing floor plan we 1st enter the ball through the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
stairs.

We then proceed towards the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kitchen
which
is separated
by an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
internal
wall. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kitchen
is located
on the right from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
entrance.

“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
we
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move
out of the
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kitchen
we need to pass through an
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internal
door. We then
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to the
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storage
which
is located
under the stairs.

We then have the living room which
is separated
from the
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storage
by an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
internal
wall.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
looking at the proposed
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changes
, We continue to enter through the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
entrance. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
storage
and stairs would
be modified
. The
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storage
space would
be increased
to
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make
room for more
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storage
of
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different
items.

As we enter from the
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main
entrance, we pass the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
internal
door which leads us to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kitchen
. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
internal
wall separates the staircase and kitchen.

Unlike the existing plan the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
internal
wall is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
demolished and the living room is accessible from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
entrance.
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IELTS essay Advantages of home schooling and learning from school

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
164 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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