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Advantages and disadvantages essay

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Modern life is impossible without travelling. Peopletravel the globe to see contemporary cities and ancient towns or just to enjoy picturesque places. Although many teenagers view travelling as entertainment, I believe it has the ability to educate. In my opinion, travel helps us understand the world so that we can accept other people's ideas and beliefs. First of all, travelling gives us an opportunity to explore the country and to learn about its history. Additionally, it is a good chance to try national food and to take part in national festivals, where you can learn about local customs and traditions. Finally, travelling is the best way to study nature for example, when you go hiking in the mountains. However, there are people who travel to all inclusive hotels and for them travelling means only entertainment. They suppose that going on the exercursions and visiting museums is a waste of time so they just relax and have fun. Nevertheless, I think that travel broadens their minds regardless of their expections because while travelling they are exposed to things which they would probably never experience if they stayed at home. Moreover, when they travel, they practise foreign languages and make new friends. In my conclusion, I believe that travel may truly expand people's outlook only it they travel in order to gain new experiences. On the contrary, if tourists are lazy, the influence will be in significant so I am convinced that travel broadens the minds but only those that want to be broadened.
Modern life is impossible without
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travelling
.
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Peopletravel
the globe to
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see
contemporary cities and ancient towns or
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just
to enjoy picturesque places. Although
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many
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teenagers
view
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travelling
as entertainment, I believe it has the ability to educate. In my opinion,
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travel
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helps
us understand the world
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so
that we can accept other
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people
's
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ideas
and beliefs.
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First of all
,
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travelling
gives us an opportunity to explore the country and to learn about its history.
Additionally
, it is a
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good
chance to try national food and to
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take part
in national festivals, where you can learn about local customs and traditions.
Finally
,
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travelling
is the best way to study nature
for example
, when you go hiking in the mountains.
However
, there are
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people
who
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travel
to
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
all inclusive
hotels and for them
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travelling
means
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only
entertainment. They suppose that going on the
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exercursions
and visiting museums is a waste of time
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so
they
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just
relax and have fun.
Nevertheless
, I
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think
that
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travel
broadens their minds regardless of their
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expections
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because
while
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travelling
they
are exposed
to things which they would
probably
never experience if they stayed at home.
Moreover
, when they
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travel
, they
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practise
foreign languages and
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make
new friends. In my conclusion, I believe that
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travel
may
truly
expand
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people
's outlook
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only
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it
they
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travel
in order to gain new experiences.
On the contrary
, if tourists are lazy, the influence will be in significant
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so
I
am convinced
that
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travel
broadens the minds
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but
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only
those that want to
be broadened
.
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IELTS essay Advantages and disadvantages essay

Essay
  American English
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252 words
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