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advanced in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone have changed the way that the nation interact with each other in a global society. choose another technological innovation that you think is important give specific reasons v.1

advanced in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone have changed the way that the nation interact with each other in a global society. choose another technological innovation that you think is important give specific reasons v. 1
Health care services have been become very expensive in recent times. There is an argument that every country should have the unpaid health service, even if latest expensive medical treatments are not available for free of cost. This Essay will argue why common and traditional medical service should be made available for everyone. Citizen's health is one of the basic needs of human being, It is the responsibility of the leadership to fulfil such basic needs. Every citizen pays money to the administration in the form of tax and hence it is argued that health care should be available to the citizen. Moreover, if any person's medical expenses is not being covered by either insurance or by government, then an individual would not be able to pay the costs incurred for medicines, surgeries and other medical related expenses. For example, recently, one of my relatives has undergone with a heart surgery, since they medical services are not free in our country, his family had to sell one of their properties for hospital expenditure. On the other side, Some people argue that nothing should be free in current economy including health care services. Hospitals may miss use the opportunity and claim fraud bill with ruling administration. Moreover, the person is more conscious on his/her well being only if medical services are not free. For Instance, In my State, during the regime of the free medical services, I had seen how people neglected their physical wellness and how hospitals misused the service. To conclude, despite of having some disadvantages with free medical services, I would prefer that governments should make medical services available for everyone, even if latest medical treatments are not available.
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have
been become
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very
expensive in recent times. There is an argument that every country should have the unpaid
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health
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service
, even if latest expensive
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medical
treatments are not
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available
for
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free
of cost. This Essay will argue why common and traditional
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medical
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service
should
be made
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available
for everyone.

Citizen's
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health
is one of the basic needs of human being, It is the responsibility of the leadership to fulfil such basic needs. Every citizen pays money to the administration in the form of tax and
hence
it
is argued
that
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health
care should be
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available
to the citizen.
Moreover
, if any person's
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medical
expenses is not
being covered
by either insurance or by
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government
, then an individual would not be able to pay the costs incurred for medicines, surgeries and other
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medical
related expenses.
For example
, recently, one of my relatives has undergone with a heart surgery, since they
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medical
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services
are not
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free
in our country, his family had to sell one of their properties for hospital expenditure.

On the other side,
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argue that nothing should be
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economy including
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health
care
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. Hospitals may miss
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use
the opportunity and claim fraud bill with ruling administration.
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, the person is more conscious on his/her
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well being
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.
For Instance
, In my State, during the regime of the
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medical
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services
, I had
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seen
how
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people
neglected their physical wellness and how hospitals misused the service.

To conclude
,
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disadvantages with
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free
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services
, I would prefer that
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governments
should
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make
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medical
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treatments are not
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.
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IELTS essay advanced in transportation and communication like the airplane and the telephone have changed the way that the nation interact with each other in a global society. choose another technological innovation that you think is important give specific reasons v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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