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Adda gain popularity, the positive sides outweigh negative sides?

Adda gain popularity, the positive sides outweigh negative sides? WgPmb
Nowadays advertising became an indispensable part of our life and today we cannot think of our life without adds. Although there exist quite a few beneficial impacts, drawbacks surpass to advantages. On the one hand, there exist quite a few benefits why advertisement play a crucial role and widely spread day by day. To begin with, individuals can be aware of about the latest products which produced recently and for being aware of the quality of product it is the best, consequently, people can purchase the fresh and healthy food by watching advertising. For example, if a person makes a decision to buy a new drink but this guy does not have enough information about this drink and by watching adds this guy will decide which drink is better for consuming. In addition, the authorities can be passed useful detail to citizens by using advertisements so that parents will supervise their children by inspiring adds which governments produced. As a result, youngsters will be in a good way and their life caring will be under the control by their parents. On the other hand, advertising is considered as a waste of time so that when people watching a movie they can face with any advertising and, consequently, it will be boring and wasting time for them. Additionally, the other kind of advertising, in which contain alcoholic beverages and cigarettes. This means that it will inspire school children to utilize them. For example, according to a comprehensive research, after allowing the cigarette advertising, the number of smokers have went up and it carries on to increase as pass the time. Finally, the advertising is not only make you fell uncomfortable, but also angry. As when people spend the time on the social media, in the interesting part of the video you can see advertising suddenly in a way that people will feel with a sense of anxiety. The more advertising, the more abominable consequences will be. In conclusion, I believe even though there exist several benefits for advertising which gain more people love and is undeniable and substantial, but the disadvantages outweigh the benefits.
Nowadays advertising became an indispensable part of our life and
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today
we cannot
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think
of our life without
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adds
. Although there exist quite a few beneficial impacts, drawbacks surpass to advantages.

On the one hand, there exist quite a few benefits why advertisement play a crucial role and
widely
spread day by day. To
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begin
with, individuals can be aware of about the latest products which produced recently and for being aware of the quality of product it is the best,
consequently
,
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people
can
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purchase
the fresh and healthy food by watching advertising.
For example
, if a person
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makes
a decision to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a new drink
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but
this guy does not have
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enough
information about this drink and by watching
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adds
this guy will decide which drink is better for consuming.
In addition
, the authorities can
be passed
useful detail to citizens by using advertisements
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so
that parents will supervise their children by inspiring
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adds
which
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governments
produced.
As a result
, youngsters will be in a
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good
way and their life caring will be under the control by their parents.

On the other hand
, advertising
is considered
as a waste of
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time
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so
that when
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people
watching a movie they can face with any advertising and,
consequently
, it will be boring and wasting
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time
for them.
Additionally
, the other kind of advertising, in which contain alcoholic beverages and cigarettes. This means that it will inspire school children to utilize them.
For example
, according to a comprehensive research, after allowing the cigarette advertising, the number of smokers have
Use past participle here: "gone".
went
up and it carries on to increase as pass the
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time
.
Finally
, the advertising is not
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only
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make
you fell uncomfortable,
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but
also
angry. As when
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people
spend the
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time
on the social media, in the interesting part of the video you can
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see
advertising
suddenly
in a way that
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people
will feel with a sense of anxiety. The more advertising, the more abominable consequences will be.

In conclusion
, I believe
even though
there exist several benefits for advertising which gain more
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people
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love
and is undeniable and substantial,
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but
the disadvantages outweigh the benefits.
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IELTS essay Adda gain popularity, the positive sides outweigh negative sides?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
353 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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