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According to some people government should focus on industries where as others opine that Government should focus on education

According to some people government should focus on industries where as others opine that Government should focus on education 7JOaX

In the current scenario, the developing countries are encouraging both education sectors and industries sector. In my opinion, both plays significant role in building the nation however education plays more important role in shaping the people of that country. This essay will discuss about major impact of both education and industries. Firstly, by boosting educational sector produces healthy knowledgeable people who can survive in competitive world. The world is rapidly changing in terms of technology and it is in need of competitive people. By acquiring good knowledge the person can start his own startup and start recruiting many people which in term helps in growing nation. Secondly,

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