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Action movies inspire youngsters to imitate risky things like car races and stunts they watch in movies. what should be done to discourage this form of imitation?

Action movies inspire youngsters to imitate risky things like car races and stunts they watch in movies. what should be done to discourage this form of imitation? YBnyK
whether to demoralize the youngsters to do dangerous activity which they have seen on TV in shows or movies or not has become a matter of discussion. I agree with the former view. To initiate with there are many ways through them we can aware our youngsters, how much dangerous it is? first and foremost through these activities, their whole carrier or life can be spoiled while performing any stunts like racing. If any miss happening will happen. To explain action performed in movies
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activity which they have
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or movies or not has become a matter of discussion. I
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ways through them we
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can aware
our youngsters, how much
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it is?
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first
and foremost through these activities, their whole carrier or life can
be spoiled
while performing any stunts like racing.
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any miss happening will happen. To
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action performed in
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movies
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IELTS essay Action movies inspire youngsters to imitate risky things like car races and stunts they watch in movies. what should be done to discourage this form of imitation?

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