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about a gift you have received from your parents.

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My parents have given me many gifts, but my favorite gift is a laptop. I was given that gift by my parents when I was 16 years old. It's a Dell vostro i5 3000 laptop. This laptop is available in black color. I don't know the price of the laptop as it was a gift but it has been priceless for me. This gift has been very beneficial for me. It has helped me both educationally and socially. I use my laptop whenever I have to do an assignment or report. I also talk or communicate with my friends by using different websites and applications. It was an indispensable part of helping me get into Hanoi University of Science and Technology and it still sticks with me to this day. In short, this laptop is extremely important to me.
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is available in black color. I don't know the price of the
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as it was a
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it has been priceless for me. This
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has been
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beneficial for me. It has
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whenever I
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do an assignment or report. I
also
talk or communicate with my friends by using
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different
websites and applications. It was an indispensable part of helping me
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get
into Hanoi University of Science and Technology and it
still
sticks with me to this day. In short, this
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extremely
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IELTS essay about a gift you have received from your parents.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
139 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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