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helping other people or enhancing time management or improving physical well-being and eating healthy food

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Generally speaking, people select their goals based on their preference and advantages, which bring to them. All of these three choices benefit people from different aspects. While some people are obsessed with the first and second purpose, I subscribe to the view that the merits of third option outweigh the advantages of the other options. I substantiate this belief by providing two compelling reasons that will be explained in the following paragraphs. Firstly, the foremost reason that I make me to select paying more attention to my physical health and the food I eat is that it exerts a positive influence on my performance. Since all body organs give their energy from the food that each individual eat, the type of food we eat and the amount of exercise people do during the day considerably affect them. Therefore, if I have a healthy diet and exercise on a daily basis, I will not diagnose a number of illnesses repeatedly, which results in having body health and carrying out my task effectively. It is true that assisting other people is an interesting goal and benefit each person mentally. However, it does not bring them body health to accomplish their tasks. As an example, for three months, I exercised daily. After that period of time, my backache noticeably was healed, and my doctor let me to get back to work, because there was no need to rest anymore. The final reason is that it influences my mental health positively. Brain cells such as the other organs’ cells are directly affected by the nutrients they receive. If people eat healthy food, these cells receive some chemicals that are very good for the body. Therefore, the function of these cells is not disturbed. Furthermore, having some exercise daily results in releasing some chemicals in the body, which cause happiness for persons. As a result, since brain cells function appropriately, people have mental health. Although improving time management skill can cause little stress for each individual, it does not affect mental health as much as exercise and healthy food does. To further illustrate this issue, consider my uncle. He suffered from depression. His doctor seriously advised him to change his diet and exercise on a daily basis. After changing his life style and following his doctor’s advice, his mental health situation improved vitally. However, in this matter, he was not able to take advantage of improving time management skill top treat his illnesse. In conclusion, based on the above-mentioned reasons, I firmly choose to have healthy diet and exercise. Because not only do these two factors affect my ability to perform my tasks noticeably, but also it exerts a positive impact on my mental health.
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speaking,
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select their goals based on their preference and advantages, which bring to them. All of these three choices benefit
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people
from
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different
aspects. While
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some
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people
are obsessed
with the
first
and second purpose, I subscribe to the view that the merits of third option outweigh the advantages of the other options. I substantiate this belief by providing two compelling
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reasons
that will be
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explained
in the following paragraphs.

Firstly
, the foremost
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reason
that I
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make
me to select paying more attention to my physical
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health
and the
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food
I
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eat
is that it exerts a
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positive
influence on my performance. Since all
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body
organs give their energy from the
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food
that each individual
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eat
, the type of
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food
we
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eat
and the amount of
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exercise
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people
do during the day
considerably
affect them.
Therefore
, if I have a
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healthy
diet and
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exercise
on a
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daily
basis, I will not diagnose a number of illnesses
repeatedly
, which results in having
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body
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health
and carrying out my task
effectively
. It is true that assisting other
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people
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is
an interesting goal and benefit each person mentally.
However
, it does not bring them
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body
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health
to accomplish their tasks. As an example, for three months, I exercised
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daily
. After that period of time, my backache
noticeably
was healed
, and my doctor
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let
me to
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get
back to work,
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because
there was no need to rest anymore.

The final
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reason
is that it influences my
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mental
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health
positively
. Brain
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cells
such as the other organs’
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cells
are
directly
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affected
by the nutrients they receive. If
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people
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eat
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healthy
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food
, these
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cells
receive
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some
chemicals that are
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very
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good
for the
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body
.
Therefore
, the function of these
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cells
is not disturbed.
Furthermore
, having
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some
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exercise
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daily
results in releasing
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some
chemicals in the
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body
, which cause happiness for persons.
As a result
, since brain
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cells
function
appropriately
,
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people
have
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mental
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health
. Although improving time management
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skill
can cause
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little
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stress
for each individual, it does not affect
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mental
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health
as much as
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exercise
and
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healthy
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food
does. To
further
illustrate this issue, consider my uncle. He suffered from depression. His doctor
seriously
advised him to
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change
his diet and
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exercise
on a
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daily
basis. After changing his life style and following his doctor’s advice, his
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mental
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health
situation
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improved
vitally
.
However
, in this matter, he was not able to take advantage of improving time management
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skill
top treat his
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illnesse
.

In conclusion
, based on the above-mentioned
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reasons
, I
firmly
choose to have
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healthy
diet and
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exercise
.
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Because
not
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only
do these two factors affect my ability to perform my tasks
noticeably
,
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but
also
it exerts a
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positive
impact on my
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mental
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health
.
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IELTS essay helping other people or enhancing time management or improving physical well-being and eating healthy food

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
450 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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