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abobus nosway is pikojjhn jhni n8unmuim

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First, the cans need to be taken from sorting bins to special collection centers instead of being thrown away with the standard refuse. The cans are collected from here and delivered to a factory where they're first sorted then cleaned. Next, the cans are cleaned and sorted after that it crushed and compressed in special machine. The metal is then heated to a high enough temperature to allow the aluminum to melt. Then metal extended flat to a thickness of between 2. 5mm and 6 mm. After that aluminum is now ready to be recycled into new packaging, like drink containers. Finally, the new cans are delivered to a soft drinks factory where they're filled. The cans can now be sold to the final public and reused. In the UK, 74 per cent of all aluminum cans that are sold are recycled.
First
, the
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cans
need to
be taken
from sorting bins to special collection centers
instead
of
being thrown
away with the standard refuse.

The
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cans
are collected
from here and delivered to a factory where they're
first
sorted then cleaned.

Next
, the
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cans
are cleaned
and sorted after that it crushed and compressed in special machine.

The metal is then heated to a high
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enough
temperature to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
the aluminum to melt.

Then metal extended flat to a thickness of between 2.
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5mm
and 6 mm. After that aluminum is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
ready to
be recycled
into new packaging, like drink containers.

Finally
, the new
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cans
are delivered
to a soft
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drinks
factory where they're filled.

The
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cans
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can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
be sold
to the final public and reused. In the UK, 74 per cent of all aluminum
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cans
that
are sold
are recycled
.

IELTS essay abobus nosway is pikojjhn jhni n8unmuim

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
142 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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