Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

A staff member of a hotel has helped you in a difficult situation. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. What was the problem? What has happened? What should be done by the manager? v.1

A staff member of a hotel has helped you in a difficult situation. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. What was the problem? What has happened? What should be done by the manager? v. 1
In the contemporary world, sports and distinct exercises are performed by the individuals of all the age groups in different nations throughout the world. This essay intends to delve into the advantages which include healthy and disease free body as well as disadvantages including muscle pain and cramps. I think merits outweigh the demerits. The main advantage of doing regular exercise is physical well-being and mental satisfaction. Because whenever an individual perform some type of physical work, such as yogic asanas and many more, then they perspire a lot, which remove the toxic substances from the body and keep them away from various infectious diseases. Also, if sports are played regularly by the children, then their overall development is greatly influenced. For instance, in the northern part of India, 21st June is celebrated as the Yoga day to emphasize the benefits of yoga, which in turn, has benefitted a vast section of the society varying from children to adults. This way the pros of making exercise a part of the daily routine are definitely plentiful. However, the disadvantage of excessive workout cannot be neglected since it sometimes causes muscle pain and can prove fatal, if performed without the help of a trainer. All these are done in a systematic manner, otherwise can create serious harm to the organs of the human being, such as fracture in the bones and weakness in the body. For example, our youth is continuously focusing on their fitness. Although I certainly agree that it is excellent, but they should take proper care as the excess of everything is bad. To recapitulate, one must keep in mind its havoc to the body in order to prevent any health related injury. To sum up, it is undeniable that exercise has become popular among people of all ages. Despite having certain cons of excess work, pros have an edge. I think with careful measurements we can take the full advantage of a healthy body by exercising daily.
In the contemporary world, sports and distinct
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exercises
are performed
by the individuals of all the age groups in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
nations throughout the world. This essay intends to delve into the advantages which include healthy and disease free
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body
as well
as disadvantages including muscle pain and cramps. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
merits outweigh the demerits.

The main advantage of doing regular
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exercise
is physical well-being and mental satisfaction.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
whenever an individual perform
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
type of physical work, such as yogic
Possible spelling mistake found.
asanas
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
more, then they perspire a lot, which remove the toxic substances from the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
them away from various infectious diseases.
Also
, if sports
are played
regularly
by the children, then their
overall
development is
greatly
influenced.
For instance
, in the northern part of India, 21st June
is celebrated
as the Yoga day to emphasize the benefits of yoga, which in turn, has
Possible spelling mistake found.
benefitted
a vast section of the society varying from children to adults. This way the pros of making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exercise
a part of the daily routine are definitely plentiful.

However
, the disadvantage of excessive workout cannot
be neglected
since it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
causes muscle pain and can prove fatal, if performed without the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of a trainer. All these
are done
Consider replacing "in a systematic manner" with the adverb for "systematic"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a systematic manner
,
otherwise
can create serious harm to the organs of the human being, such as fracture in the bones and weakness in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body
.
For example
, our youth is
continuously
focusing on their fitness. Although I
certainly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that it is excellent,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they should take proper care as the excess of everything is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
. To recapitulate, one
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
in mind its havoc to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body
in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
any health related injury.

To sum up, it is undeniable that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
exercise
has become popular among
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
of all ages. Despite having certain cons of excess work, pros have an edge. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
with careful measurements we can take the full advantage of a healthy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
body
by exercising daily.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay A staff member of a hotel has helped you in a difficult situation. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. What was the problem? What has happened? What should be done by the manager? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts