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You are the manager of a restaurant that has received a letter of complaint about the poor service from a member of your staff Write a letter of apology to the person who has complained In your letter say how sorry you are that the person has had a poor e v.1

You are the manager of a restaurant that has received a letter of complaint about the poor service from a member of your staff Write a letter of apology to the person who has complained In your letter say how sorry you are that the person has had a poor e v. 1
In the modern world, the masses purchase only those things which are of great quality and meet their requirements. Therefore, folks believe that adverts are no longer needed and just a source of entertainment. I completely disagree with the notion because advertisements help people to know about new products and it influences them. To commence with, if companies advertise their products, then the customers would come to know about their newly launched product. They not only gain information about its features, but also tell them how to use it. So, that is why advertisements are needed. For example, Apple is a renowned brand in mobile-phone and mainly known for its quality products. Recently, according to their in-house survey, it is found that there is a fifty percent decline in the sale of the newly launched phone despite its build because they did not do any promotions. Hence, advertisement plays a pivotal role to sell new products. Moreover, commercials also support the companies to push the customers to buy their goods because there is a huge competition in the market among the companies, and the number of high-quality products is available to purchase. Thus to boost the sale adverts are essential. For instance, in Inida, there are two big brands namely Bajaj and Hero Honda, who manufacture bikes. Their equipment is equally good, so to convince the folks to buy their product and boost its sale, they promote it. Thereby, it is apparent that advertising is vital to selling things. To summarize, advertisements are important even if the product quality is good. In my opinion, it informs the masses about new launches as well as help them to choose the right product.
In the modern world, the masses
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purchase
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only
those things which are of great quality and
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meet
their requirements.
Therefore
, folks believe that adverts are no longer needed and
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just
a source of entertainment. I completely disagree with the notion
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because
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advertisements
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help
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people
to know about new
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products
and it influences them.

To commence with, if
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companies
advertise their
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products
, then the customers would
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come
to know about their
newly
launched
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product
. They not
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only
gain information about its features,
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but
also
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tell
them how to
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use
it.
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So
,
that is
why
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advertisements
are needed
.
For example
, Apple is a renowned brand in mobile-phone and
mainly
known for its quality
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products
. Recently, according to their in-
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house
survey, it
is found
that there is a fifty percent decline in the sale of the
newly
launched phone despite its build
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because
they did not do any promotions.
Hence
,
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advertisement
plays a pivotal role to sell new products.

Moreover
, commercials
also
support the
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companies
to push the customers to
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buy
their
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goods
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because
there is a huge competition in the market among the
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companies
, and the number of high-quality
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products
is available to
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purchase
.
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Thus
to boost the sale adverts are essential.
For instance
, in
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Inida
, there are two
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big
brands
namely
Bajaj and Hero Honda, who manufacture bikes. Their equipment is
equally
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good
,
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so
to convince the folks to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
their
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product
and boost its sale, they promote it. Thereby, it is apparent that advertising is vital to selling things.

To summarize
,
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advertisements
are
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important
even if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
quality is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
. In my opinion, it informs the masses about new launches
as well
as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them to choose the right
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay You are the manager of a restaurant that has received a letter of complaint about the poor service from a member of your staff Write a letter of apology to the person who has complained In your letter say how sorry you are that the person has had a poor e v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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