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A Special Excursion in Disneyland

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A time when I was waiting for something special was when I visited Disneyland sometime last month. As coronavirus spreads across the board, Disneyland is doing its duties to the community to contain the spread of the virus. One measure to do this was to limit the capacity of visitors they accommodate. As a result, the scheme of buying ticket totally changed. Before the onset of the pandemic, outright ticket purchase was possible. But now, you had to make reservation in advance since getting a ticket was as hard as winning the lottery. As luck was with me, I finally managed to secure 5 passes for us. Words are not enough to explain how excited I was. I kept on counting the days for our special excursion to the dream land. This activity inspired me to finished my tasks energetically. Eventhough I have been to Disneyland a countless times, the excitement that I feel everytime I go there seems like the first time.
A time when I was waiting for something special was when I visited Disneyland sometime last month. As coronavirus spreads across the board, Disneyland is doing its duties to the community to contain the spread of the virus.

One measure to do this was to limit the capacity of visitors they accommodate.
As a result
, the scheme of buying ticket
totally
changed
.
Before
the onset of the pandemic, outright ticket
purchase
was possible.
But
now
, you had to
make
reservation in advance since getting a ticket was as
hard
as winning the lottery.

As luck was with me, I
finally
managed to secure 5 passes for us. Words are not
enough
to
explain
how excited I was. I
kept
on counting the days for our special excursion to the dream land. This activity inspired me to finished my tasks
energetically
.
Eventhough
I have been to Disneyland a countless
times
, the excitement that I feel
everytime
I go there seems like the
first
time.
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IELTS essay A Special Excursion in Disneyland

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
163 words
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5.0
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