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A Special Day in Disneyland

A Special Day in Disneyland 5aonP
A time when I was waiting for something special was when I visited Disneyland sometime last month. As coronavirus spreads across the board, Disneyland is doing its duties to the community to contain the spread of the virus. One measure to do this was to limit the capacity of visitors they accommodate. As a result, the scheme of buying ticket totally changed. Before the onset of the pandemic, outright ticket purchase was possible. But now, you had to make reservation in advance since getting a ticket was as hard as winning the lottery. As luck was with me, I finally managed to secure 5 passes for us. Words are not enough to explain how excited I was. I kept on counting the days for our special excursion to the dream land. This activity inspired me to finished my tasks energetically.
A time when I was waiting for something special was when I visited Disneyland sometime last month. As coronavirus spreads across the board, Disneyland is doing its duties to the community to contain the spread of the virus. One measure to do this was to limit the capacity of visitors they accommodate.
As a result
, the scheme of buying ticket
totally
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changed
.
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Before
the onset of the pandemic, outright ticket
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
was possible.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
, you had to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
reservation in advance since getting a ticket was as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
as winning the lottery. As luck was with me, I
finally
managed to secure 5 passes for us. Words are not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
how excited I was. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
on counting the days for our special excursion to the dream land. This activity inspired me to finished my tasks
energetically
.
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IELTS essay A Special Day in Disneyland

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
140 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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