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A short story about losing necklace

A short story about losing necklace 2am3X
For many years I took care of that necklace and never took it far because it was the only relic left from my happy days with my grandmother one day I put my necklace in my bag when I was sitting on the bus and my bag accidentally fell and the necklace was thrown out of it. I put it back in the bag and went home, I searched the bag to find the necklace, but I did not find anything. I looked everywhere at home, at work, I even went to the bus company, but there was no news of Granbamd. I became the same cold and depressed girl I was before. One day I decided to wash my bag and when I took it out of the washing machine, I saw that the necklace was inside.
For
many
years I took care of that
necklace
and never took it far
because
it was the
only
relic
left
from my happy days with my grandmother

one day I put my
necklace
in my
bag
when I was sitting on the bus and my
bag
accidentally
fell and the
necklace
was thrown
out of it. I put it back in the
bag
and went home, I searched the
bag
to find the
necklace
,
but
I did not find anything.

I looked everywhere at home, at work, I even went to the bus
company
,
but
there was no news of
Granbamd
.
I
became the same
cold
and depressed girl I was
before
. One day I decided to wash my
bag
and when I took it out of the washing machine, I
saw
that the
necklace
was inside.
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IELTS essay A short story about losing necklace

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
138 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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