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a school that you went to when you were a child.

a school that you went to when you were a child. WG6RK
The school I want to talk about is my kindergarten. It called Bong Sen. I attended it when I was 2 years old. The school located in Cu Chi district. It not far from my house so I usually go there by walk. It took me about 10 minutes from my home to school. The school is very beautiful. It was decorated colorfully. The campus has covered by flowers. It was grow by both teacher and student. In each class has many toys. At that time, I was still a little child so I can not remember all detail and the teacher. But I liked all of them, they were strict but kind, generous and always take care of we carefully. I was taught many things like painting, counting, writing my first letter and also singing. I felt happy everyday went to school because I have nice teachers and good friends. Sometime I want to go back those days.
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IELTS essay a school that you went to when you were a child.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
159 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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