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a school that make use of books children find it more boring while using of films, tv videos games they find it more interesting To what extent do you agree with this?

a school that make use of books children find it more boring while using of films, tv videos games they find it more interesting 06Jk9
In this technological era, technology has penetrated every aspect of our lives including the way we teach and learn. However, some people have gone further and think that books should be abandoned completely in the learning process and they should replaced with computers and other media forms. Personally, I do not agree with this opinion as learning from books has countless advantages. To begin with, it is undeniable that the using of computers and other media forms in the classroom would enrich the teaching process and make it more interactive and fun. For example, computers can be used for writing assignments and other classroom activities which are interactive and easy to correct by teachers. In addition, computers provide a visual representation of information and make it easy for students to learn and remember it. Therefore, it is understandable why many people believe that books should be replaced with videos, films and computers. Nevertheless, computers should never replace books as it has been proven that they have several benefits. Firstly, learning from books improves cognitive abilities and develop the imagination rapidly which is vital especially in early school years. Secondly, only by using books children can learn handwriting which is an essential part of learning and crucial for strengthening small hand muscles that are used in complicated and precise tasks later on in life. In conclusion, it is true that the usage of computers and other means of media is necessary in schools nowadays. However, the existence of books is also vital. Thus, it is hoped that schools around the world embrace the approach of using both of them in their classrooms.
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lives
including the way we teach and learn.
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some
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people
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further
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think
that
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books
should
be abandoned
completely in the
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learning
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process and
they should
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replaced
with computers and
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other
media forms.
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agree
with this opinion as
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learning
from
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books
has countless advantages.

To
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begin
with, it is undeniable that the using of computers and
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other
media forms in the classroom would enrich the teaching process and
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make
it more interactive and fun.
For example
, computers can be
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used
for writing assignments and
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other
classroom activities which are interactive and easy to correct by teachers.
In addition
, computers provide a visual representation of information and
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make
it easy for students to learn and remember it.
Therefore
, it is understandable why
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many
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people
believe that
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books
should
be replaced
with videos, films and computers.

Nevertheless
, computers should never replace
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books
as it has
been proven
that they have several benefits.
Firstly
,
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learning
from
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books
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improves
cognitive abilities and develop the imagination
rapidly
which is vital
especially
in early school years.
Secondly
,
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only
by using
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books
children can learn
If 'learn' is used as a verb, it usually requires the infinitive: "to handwrite".
handwriting
which is an essential part of
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learning
and crucial for strengthening
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small
hand muscles that are
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used
in complicated and precise tasks later on in life.

In conclusion
, it is true that the usage of computers and
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other
means of media is necessary in schools nowadays.
However
, the existence of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
is
also
vital.
Thus
, it
is hoped
that schools around the world embrace the approach of using both of them in their classrooms.
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IELTS essay a school that make use of books children find it more boring while using of films, tv videos games they find it more interesting

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6.5
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