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A recent study reveals that people especially young people are reading far less literature, novels, plays, and poems, than they used to. This is troubling because the trend has unfortunate effects for the reading public, for culture in general, and for the v.1

A recent study reveals that people especially young people are reading far less literature, novels, plays, and poems, than they used to. This is troubling because the trend has unfortunate effects for the reading public, for culture in general, and for the v. 1
A small proportion of people in countries around the world are said to have mass salary compare to other normal employees. It is argued that having earned huge salaries bring benefits to one country, however, others claim that it is needed to have regulations or laws to limit the amount of pay rate among these executives and managers. On the one hand, there are some benefits of offering maximum wage rates to top executives and directors of a corporation. Having a brilliant CEO or directors who understands the party's vision and mission plays a crucial role in the development of an association. In order to have these people, it is a must to pay extremely high salary rates to either attract or hold these talent workers. Paying high payment is also a way to maintain the competitive advantages of a group over competitors in the market and also to avoid loosing brilliant people into the enemy hands. For example, an Alphabet multinational party which ranks in the top ten biggest companies in the nature, pays their CEO huge amount of property to keep the community on track. Earning huge bill also guarantee that top executive will pay full attention to the development of the club and not wonder about earning their lives. In details, Tim Cook, who receives annual salaries among the highest in the nature, can spend all his time making Apple the best party in the nature. On the other hand, in my opinion, it is very risky for a country to have firms that process a huge gap between the top earners and normal workers. Having limitation on the maximum salary rate can decrease the inequality among employees in one team and by that create a friendly working environments. More payment will be invested in the long-term strategies of a corporation such as technology development, marketing strategy enhances and firm sustainability. This will bring many benefits to not only the business firm itself, but also to the nation. In conclusion, eliminating the limit of maximum cash rate can outweigh its drawbacks. Loosing top executives to other competitive countries or opposite opponents can result in the destruction of a group and economic depreciation. In my point of view, nation leaders must not setting limitation to avoid any harmful affects to the business firms and economic developments
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salary
compare to
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other
normal employees. It
is argued
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huge
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salaries
bring benefits to one
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country
,
however
, others claim that it
is needed
to have regulations or laws to limit the amount of
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pay
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rate
among these
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executives
and managers.

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some
benefits of offering maximum wage
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rates
to
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top
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executives
and directors of a corporation. Having a brilliant CEO or directors who
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understands
the party's vision and mission plays a crucial role in the
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development
of an association. In order to have these
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people
, it is a
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must to
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pay
extremely
high
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salary
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rates
to either attract or hold these talent workers. Paying high payment is
also
a way to maintain the competitive advantages of a group over competitors in the market and
also
to avoid loosing brilliant
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people
into the enemy hands.
For example
, an Alphabet multinational party which ranks in the
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top
ten biggest
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companies
in the nature,
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pays
their CEO
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huge
amount of property to
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keep
the community on
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track
. Earning
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huge
bill
also
guarantee that
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top
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executive
will
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pay
full attention to the
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development
of the club and not wonder about earning their
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lives
. In
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details
, Tim Cook, who receives annual
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salaries
among the highest in the nature, can spend all his time making Apple the best party in the nature.

On the
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other
hand, in my opinion, it is
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very
risky for a
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country
to have
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firms
that process a
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huge
gap between the
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top
earners and normal workers. Having limitation on the maximum
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salary
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rate
can decrease the inequality among employees in one team and by that create a friendly working
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environments
. More payment will
be invested
in the long-term strategies of a corporation such as technology
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development
, marketing strategy enhances and
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firm
sustainability. This will bring
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many
benefits to not
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only
the business
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firm
itself,
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also
to the nation.

In conclusion
, eliminating the limit of maximum cash
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rate
can outweigh its drawbacks. Loosing
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top
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executives
to
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other
competitive
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countries
or opposite opponents can result in the destruction of a group and economic depreciation. In my point of view, nation leaders
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must
not setting limitation to avoid any harmful affects to the business
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firms
and economic
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developments
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
The man who does not know other languages, unless he is a man of genius, necessarily has deficiencies in his ideas.
Victor Hugo

IELTS essay A recent study reveals that people especially young people are reading far less literature, novels, plays, and poems, than they used to. This is troubling because the trend has unfortunate effects for the reading public, for culture in general, and for the v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
387 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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